Illustraight
 
  1  
Reply Sun 29 Jan, 2012 05:04 am
@Rhymekilla,
Hey, not bad at all. You're leaning towards a Nas style rather than an Eminem/Immortal Technique flow. Great verse overall.
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Illustraight
 
  1  
Reply Sun 29 Jan, 2012 05:21 am
THE POSEIDON ADVENTURE

[Intro]
(sample from The Poseidon Adventure)
"So what resolution should we make for the new year? Resolve to let God know that you
have the guts and the will to do it alone. Resolve to fight for yourselves, and for others,
for those you love. And that part of God within you will be fighting with you all the way."

[Verse 1]
Yo
I'm swimming the deepest waters, filled with the sweetest calmness
No stopping me from knowing the tidal wave that keeps me rushing
I'm in a totally different +Mission+ just like Ethan Hunt is
It's not +Impossible+ to figure as I keep on shoving
This is as deep as it goes, it's not even an assumption
The whole sea's at my disposal, for my greedy consumption
I've swam only five meters, that's achieving something
**** doggy-paddling, I'm going on an easy stomach
It's pretty tough like chicken liver is, leave the onions
Keeping my head above water has never been so awkward
I'm doing lots of backstrokes as I'm leaning forward
I have to use enough strength and energy as storage
Just like eating oranges with vitamin C's important
Mental integrity's helping me as I reach the targets
There's nothing to stop me or obstruct me from completing my objects
Or objectives as I should put it, I'm just being honest

[Hook]
This is my Poseidon adventure
Riding on the tides and I'm fighting the weather
If this is a game, then I'm the contender
This is my very own Poseidon adventure
This is my own Poseidon adventure
Up for any challenge, I'm with whatever
Rappers step aside, well, I think they better
When I'm going on my Poseidon adventure 

[Verse 2]
I'm like Captain James Cook of the seas
When I'm evading every cranny, nook and degree
I really can't see the whole wood from the trees
Because there's just an ocean that is good as can be
I think I should just bring the neighbourhood just to see
The tiny little ripples that are moving with glee
Until a stormy night and the lightning strikes the water
I think it's time for me to take a dive, I oughta
I'm swimming for my life in this water with my arms out in front of me
The current's sharp like kitchen knives, forks and other cutlery
Paying no attention to the torrent that's above of me
Try not to fall victim to the peril lurking under me
The sea is unpredictable - I'm here as a stranger
Avoiding with care all the clear and present danger
Pushing real forward suppressing all my anger
Whoever thought this Poseidon adventure would be this dangerous?

[Hook]

[Verse 3]
I'm going 20,000 leagues under the sea
But I wouldn't be surprised to find what's underneath
I have coral reefs and anemones covering me
From head to toe, and they're really getting under my feet
I've got arms and eyes of octopi stuck to my teeth
And even palms and thighs of sharks and pikes touching my cheeks
A shipwreck is down below and it looks ugly to me
That's what happens when you travel not being trussed to your seats
My Poseidon adventure is deep in the abyss
And nobody knows what lies beneath the pit of it
As I'm exploring the core of the region of the ocean
I'm praying I escape in one piece and I'm just hoping
I breathe in and I hold it long enough to survive
This whole journey has been one **** of a ride
I wonder what would've happened if I was just to die
and the hole just sucked me all dry? The ************ can try!

[Hook]
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Akrap8
 
  1  
Reply Sun 29 Jan, 2012 05:27 am
@Whitmofomonkysmugla2,
I'm pissed off, I cant do it anymore
I'm sick of watchin corners full of drug and whores
I'm not really a God, I'm just a ghost that hip hop awakens and inokes
I likes to provoke culturally educated people in the hall
What the **** they know bout my culture, they cant fool this little boy
that fuckin rebel wearing nuthin like school clothes
All I do is rap, ball and sag
People think I'm an lunatic, they mad
Theycall me God, well I wanna be rap saint
This first freestyle without the sickness, all I rapped was illnes
I'll be the only fuckin rapper rappin for my village
Why my mum birth me?
So other kids could abuse me ?
I'm fuckin thug so I found that amusing
but it still aint right to fun other people just fo fuckin fooling

This all for now, rap more later
That rappin for my village line dope, aint it?
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Whitmofomonkysmugla2
 
  2  
Reply Sun 29 Jan, 2012 08:43 am
@Rhymekilla,
I like it good Multis
Akrap8
 
  1  
Reply Sun 29 Jan, 2012 08:56 am
@Whitmofomonkysmugla2,
so what you think bout this Cro-freestyle of mines?
BTW: agreed on this, dope stuff Rhymekilla
Whitmofomonkysmugla2
 
  1  
Reply Sun 29 Jan, 2012 09:29 am
@Akrap8,
Oh my bad didn't see it uhh good stuff nice message it kind of builds up towards the end the rhyme scheme is a little off at a coUple points but overall I like it! Good stuff homie
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Bambino
 
  1  
Reply Sun 29 Jan, 2012 10:10 am
@Rhymekilla,
I can't really figure out a flow through text but the lyrics are nice.

No one can figure a flow through text. Do you record at all?

Cause if you add vocals and **** to your lyrics, it'll be dope.
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lil host
 
  1  
Reply Sun 29 Jan, 2012 10:34 am
@Akrap8,
ma name is the king
cuz i am always big i neva shrink
bitch i amma tell u ma words so hear him
i amma tell u preciuos words **** i know u will steal'em
i dont play i fight
i batlle with no fight
ok thats right
bitch iamma till u wat to do open the light
see ur self in the mirror
bitch u look like michael jackson's thriller
Rhymekilla
 
  2  
Reply Sun 29 Jan, 2012 10:43 am
Illustraight , AKrap , Whitemofo and bambino...thanks btw.

ILLUSTRAIGHT - that was fuckin creative man. Respect.

BAMBINO - homie I don't do vocals and ****. Just lyricism for a hobby. Btw I'm an indian livin in india, so no real scope for rap here at all. The only rapper known here is Eminem...the underground is literally unknown.

Here's another one : CHECK IT YO Very Happy

This a soldiers game, holdin aim,roll n play/
things been changed ever since the homies came/
on the scene/
with a beanie and a bandage on they chin/
bigmouths versin raps spat through collagen/
napkins ripped with a cocky pen/
spit blood just chokin on oxygen/
on the microphone, jokin like they high and stoned/
sly yet slow, my styles a reaction from an acidic flow/
raised up where these rapists roll/
tryin to earn pennies with sex tapes sold/
where men are cold and lil dames die broke/
instead of toys these kids toy with dope/
**** the cereals ,get wild with coke/
revolutions a joke, politicians all croak/
Live life spinnin smith & Wessons and smoke/
rebels fight with they souls/
bodies sliced in the throat/
guns smokin in barrels/
apparently, its christmas with no fuckin carols/
cause the voices all dead in they graves/
women forced to give head to the 'brave'/
Inhalin gunpowder at night, lead in the day/
Peacetalkers said they'd be back, and they then just sped away/
We don't expect to be saved, faggot greasetalkers are they/
Swords strapped to our backs, keepin backstabbers at bay/
Self protection's our play, know I'm ill with the bass/
Reppin my place, switchin topics with grace/
These comics a day, keeps my opponents away/
These punchlines all flared, metaphors just go crazed/
Makin my mind all heavy to bear, leavin my rhymin skills dazed/...

Honest rating anyone ?
Akrap8
 
  1  
Reply Sun 29 Jan, 2012 11:23 am
@lil host,
Muthafucka I'm the man who created you
nigga I'm slayin you , holly God , bitch I aint playin you
anit got nuthin to say, is that why you are replayin you?
**** you, **** host even **** the little
I'm talkin to an animal, 'em I freakin Dollitle?
I put my headphones, maybe do dreadlocks
And watch you burn like a muthafuckin sexphone
I can rap more, but no need to do it
This aint even a battle, bitch just screw it
Akrap8
 
  1  
Reply Sun 29 Jan, 2012 11:26 am
@Rhymekilla,
Rajesh Koothrappali <3
Sorry for my comparation Cro with India, didn't know
BTW: mane, dope ****
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Whitmofomonkysmugla2
 
  2  
Reply Sun 29 Jan, 2012 11:30 am
Anyone for a friendly battle?
Whitmofomonkysmugla2
 
  1  
Reply Sun 29 Jan, 2012 11:32 am
@Rhymekilla,
8/10 your rhymes schemes are great your punches could use more cleverness of course this doesn't seem like a punch line verse but I like of anyway good stuff
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Akrap8
 
  1  
Reply Sun 29 Jan, 2012 11:40 am
@Whitmofomonkysmugla2,
Pick me, me, me , me xD

BTW: Drazen Petrovic was from Croatia, Vlade Divac, Nikola Tesla ... Lol
Akrap8
 
  1  
Reply Sun 29 Jan, 2012 11:57 am
@Rhymekilla,
Rhymekilla, wanna battle?
Whitmofomonkysmugla2
 
  2  
Reply Sun 29 Jan, 2012 12:01 pm
@Akrap8,
Lol aight spit a verse
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Rhymekilla
 
  1  
Reply Sun 29 Jan, 2012 12:26 pm
@Akrap8,
Yeah sure why not man... Btw its 12 10 am here in india...past bedtime haha. I'll battle tomorrow then . Night.
Akrap8
 
  1  
Reply Sun 29 Jan, 2012 12:29 pm
@Rhymekilla,
Good, but dont cry after Razz
Whitmofomonkysmugla2
 
  1  
Reply Sun 29 Jan, 2012 12:45 pm
@Akrap8,
In the mean time u can make mine aha
Akrap8
 
  1  
Reply Sun 29 Jan, 2012 12:56 pm
@Whitmofomonkysmugla2,
I'm waiting u to start, I just finished his but ...
I'm not shure shall I diss his people, his gods and the holly cow
 

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