Neverending Rap Battle

you livin yo life based on a damn dream
u just met the realest g you've eva seen
listen close u little pussy n stand tough
i always play rough
cut your throught, watch you bleed
your lyrics (gay) <-- hey look im like you see!
push you off a cliff and say WHOOOO!
and as you look up, watch as god above
denies you, sends u down to suicide you
call my bluff i aint playin
i aint afraid of nothin, so don't even bother
ill rape ur mom n leave just like your father
mistakes happen when
you livin life by the day
and i live mine by the minuite
now we playin life as a game n were in it
can't stop or finish, can't even replenish
i got the home feild advantage
one verses ten i still manage
close the doors as i put a condom on a jackhammer
everyone ignors when u scream
this aint one of your bitch ass dreams
its your reality
pulling apart at the seams

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RATE THIS PLEASE ^^^^^

Punchlines: 6/10
Metaphors: 5/10
Multisyllables: 4/10
Flow: 6/10
Structure: 3/10
Overall 5.5 just being honest u have like no multi's , ur structure is all over the place , u have a few disses n like no metaphors i might even drop ur metaphor score a couple points just cause im not trying to hurt ur feelings ! im trying to tell you what ur lacking from what i see!

@charliesforce,

listen up listen up
you end everything in I.N.G,
when you should rap about life experiences like H.I.V
VIP
access to aids and gonarea
wearin fuchsia thinkin its red
guy of the same genre layin on your bed
fred is a thickheaded female crossbred layin down your bedspread
misled from your faggot ass
co-ed
your face is turnin bright red while your skiing with his masthead you remember you misread his application
turns out your imbred takin your cousins spearhead in the back shed
put a condom on it an its a bobsled
jump on your moped
ill fly by with my wingspread eatin shortbread
rippin you to shreds
leavin with nothin left but bloodshed everywhere but your forehead
cause thats where i wrote dead with my urine
deathbed

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/|\W0nda Pluss /|\
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killin it bitches

first day on the this stage
yall stared to imitate what u see on the page
ur just a bunch of pigeons
copying and deliver -in
hay u ant heating on me
when u copy my rhymeskime
it just goes to show
number 1 under the sun
son

Imma rate this ****

Round 1-Dont care
Round 2-Dont care
Round 3-Dont care
Round 748437583275409432-Dont give a ****

AYO BRUH! LETS RATE THIS **** THE REAL WAY!

At the last round in which they battle, Everyone on this thread just type in who evers name (charlieforce or Prashant Shady II) in reply. THEN WHO EVER HAS THE MOST VOTES WINS! EASY ENOUGH!

@ theprofessor, Illustraight , Tic Tac Nic

From what I've seen in REAL rap battles like Iron Solomon, Thesaurus and ****, the raps aren't rated MUCH on the basis of the things Proff has said, metaphors and all...
Sure they play a part but not as much as the insults do..

I wanted y'all to rate it according to who packed the BETTER INSULTS and OFFENSES (because I was focusing on that, never wanted to cram in multies, metaphors and ****)

Example - "ETHER" is said to be one of the greatest diss tracks of time, but I don't think it had those many multies, metaphors , even though it had a great flow.
THAT's what inspires me. It was straightforward dissing.

ANYWAYS SINCE I WENT FIRST IN THE PREV ROUNDS, LET CHARLIE GO FIRST NOW. ( And please rate the 4th round too)

Peace.

Im the new Mc just tryna spit my game
Not dissing no one, not dissing on ya name
i saw this sight once i always thought it was lame
but its such good practice its messing with my brain
everyone did i mention i completely insane
no more cells in my brain, its draining me from sane.
im not here to complain but here to sustain
the rap of my age
step up to the stage
bustin getting loose cuz im sick of this cage
im on the right page check out my gaze
im blazed from they hay dissin me wont even faze
me in any way
im only here to rap and collect my pay.
im right here and i will stay you cant push me all you want
but im chill relax and roll myself another blunt.

JayBee

I did not think that you were religious by some of the comments that you made, I was just jokingly making sure, that is why I used a question mark at the end of the sentence!

I do not find it odd that you would think that I am ignorant!

Ignore rant is not always the worst thing to be doing, that is why the moderators have added a tool for you when you want to ignore rant, you simply click on the ignore user link and all of my post will disappear like magic! Depriving yourself and other young people of a better education could be seen as a worse thing!

By the way, I do not think that any of you are stupid I think that you all have the same problems as the rest of the world { you have been exposed to a environment that made you the way you are}

If we changed our environment then we would change as well! If we were born in Afghanistan our language, religion, ideology, and our behavior would not be the same! So just how much control of yourself do you think that you have without expanding on your frame of reference?


I doubt that anyone could answer this simple question!
How big is the diamond that is buried in my back yard?



http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Yo7lxuwLC9I

1st off hahahahha iron solomon an thesauraus are not real rap battles hahaha
scribble jam , freestyle fridays on b.e.t. , shiit those are real battles real rappers , iron solomon an thesauraus are on the amatuer circuit !!


2ndly the reason WRITTEN rap battles are judged this way is because u can't hear the person rappin so how can u hear the flow ? u see the Flow its the structure , an multi'syllables , an no multi's aren't what wins battles by themselves but put together with metaphors punchlines an all that other **** u do win, an what you will notice is at higher levels of competition guys like eminem rhymefest immortal technique n so on all use multi's with punchlines ! its what makes there **** sound so potent !!!!


and ether a good song "i know its acclaimed to be one of the best but to be honest eminems diss against bencino way better , even kurupts song calling out names is better for straight cussing

but **** listen to diabolic an jakki the mottamouth an there even better at dissing !


if you don't like the way im rating i wont rate anymore , I probally just cookie cut you all the nicest blueprint possible for writing rhymes n u just throw it back in my face insolent basterds ! PEACE

i really dont have time to spare with battling over and over again man, i got allot of work to do in the next year, i dont mind having the odd battle and ours where good, but they draggingon a bit now so lets move on to something else
peace

I have an idea lets have competitions ! like who can do the best battle rap , the best story rap , the best topic raps an so on or things like abc slaughter ! anyone else down for this???

NIGGA TELL ME HOW U DO THAT BOLDED ****! I want to use it in my rap battles lol

Ima Veteran at killing the villains upon a riddim
When their bitten by the python the venom will kill dem
And im never gonna give in,
Nearly everybody told me to forget about living the dream
So this is for the real friends,
And a middle finger to the haters who never beleived
You wasnt better than me,

yh im down for that

yo charlie force lets pick a style or topic or something i don't care what lets just do it ! or things like see who can make a verse using only 4 syllables per line or like a 4 . 4 .6 scheme im up for whatevski's

I would be up for that too...but Charlie lets just have one more round. You go first.
And I just started writin rap 2 months back, so not very good at rhymin about other "topics" like Illustraight does. But anyways can give it a try.

Strange...cause Iron, Saurus and all are the most notable battle rappers.
Talkin about Scribble Jam and ****, you must have seen the Partner on partner Illmaculate vs Saurus.
Illmaculate hardly rhymed but whipped Saurus's ass in the 2nd round (or 3rd round ?? I'm not sure)
I have no probs about the Multis and Punchline thing. But ONLY multi's and metaphors with no punchlines or actual insults (like charlie's 2nd battle, no offense) isnt enough to win.
I would suggest SOMETHIN like this :
Punshlines:
Metaphors:
Aggression:
Multis:
Flow:

Haha just some wild take, as far as I've seen people rate battles like this. And i'm not talkin WRITTEN rap battles. I picture myself actually SPITTIN those words when I write. Thats why. Cause I wanna learn to freestyle. Proff how long did it take between the time you started to write rhymes and you developed the ability to freestyle out loud ??

some 'BBcode Editor' pops out over the reply box when ya edit the post. Thats how.

OH YEAH!