WhiteMofoMonkysmugla
 
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Reply Fri 3 May, 2013 01:27 pm
@theprofessor,
I wrote my verse at the driving semenar came home and went online to load it I read your verse and fell asleep in the middle of typing it then when I woke up I finished typing and posted it

Believe what you believe I know what I did and didn't do
WhiteMofoMonkysmugla
 
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Reply Fri 3 May, 2013 01:28 pm
@theprofessor,
Well you may have heard it but I haven't
theprofessor
 
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Reply Fri 3 May, 2013 01:31 pm
@WhiteMofoMonkysmugla,
ok so thats proves that U DID read my verse

and U DID write rebuttles

... great now we all know what you did and not just me Razz
theprofessor
 
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Reply Fri 3 May, 2013 01:32 pm
@WhiteMofoMonkysmugla,
yea , im either gonna find out who said it first , or if it was ever written , cause its way to familiar
Illustraight
 
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Reply Fri 3 May, 2013 01:38 pm
@theprofessor,
https://soundcloud.com/illustraight/watch-your-back

I thought of King Gordy when I made this. Leaning more on horrorcore, but it can be a hip-hop track as well.
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WhiteMofoMonkysmugla
 
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Reply Fri 3 May, 2013 01:50 pm
@theprofessor,
My verse was already written when I read it I didn't make rebuttals
theprofessor
 
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Reply Fri 3 May, 2013 01:58 pm
@WhiteMofoMonkysmugla,
r u razed enough yet ???
Downloadable Content
 
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Reply Fri 3 May, 2013 02:26 pm
@theprofessor,
Lol like I give a **** what a bunch of dick riders think about me...

If you think you're bars were hot you in the minority
You really thinking that you fresh man?
You soft more to me so I'm schooling you junior, show respect to seniority
See man I'm not impressed with you're patterns and schemes
You don't know what a syllable actually means
You're an undeveloped artist which is bad for the scene
Because you haven't changed the cadences you had as a teen
I give a **** about the fact that you're an established MC
I give a **** about the trash that you've spat Calgary
I'm that up and coming threat they be asking to see
And they only watching you still cuz you battlin me
But yo question. Where'd you get all the confidence and you're bars
If you had the keys to beat me, you'd lock them in you're car.
You're annoying voice got us on the bottom of the card
You sound constipated, but the **** you're dropping isn't hard
Just looking at Murdock's lines its obvious you got killed
You got chewed by a biter, you Evander Holyfield
Pause.
All you kids here can't keep my name out their mouth, like I'm the pinnacle of their careers
You still on my dick, get a hobby its literally been some years
You guys claim to battle rap so pitifully its severe
Probably because you can only get wins when its here
With you're biased home crowd and judges trying to make history disappear
I don't know who lied to you all or is whispering in you're ear
But look at the verses, the victor is visibly in the clear
The world disagrees with the shady infamy of you're peers
You call this true victory, you're the epitome of a queer
Big lame, **** stain, belligerent babbling idiot
The only claim you made that was significant was as an SSD recipient
Over confident, conceited, narcissistic, but insignificant
Undisciplined, immature, suspect virgin, hideous simpleton
Oblivious to the fact that you look and sound ridiculous
Cuz you're lifes a series of instances and incidences of arrogance and ignorance
You can't keep you're mouth closed like a dental patient
I gotta get sedated just to hear you voice and even then my head is aching
Every round you spit sounds like one long depressing statement
So if you thinking Professor's a Pro. You probably need you're medication
Me to though, White boy ****, Attack you with a sharpened sword
One swipe will take half off and bag him like a department store
But I keep hacking at his limbs and head, till his ribs in shreds, carve some more
Use the parts and core to make sculptures to sell on ebay, ain't that the art of war?
I'll take you're cake, scrape you're plate, you're dealing with a carvavoire
And judging by you're weight attention won't be the only thing you're starving for...
But Some white boys weren't meant for hip hop so grab a guitar
And write a heart warming love ballad like the faggot you are.
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WhiteMofoMonkysmugla
 
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Reply Fri 3 May, 2013 02:27 pm
@theprofessor,
Lol why would I lie that I didn't write rebuttals? I love writing rebuttals if I wrote any I would take credit for it
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theprofessor
 
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Reply Fri 3 May, 2013 02:33 pm
in the dungeon shackled an chained, hearing the tormentors cackle again, lips dry under the castles reign , cattle feign beef , well mothers utters getting milked, every sip tastes of guilt , mutters fill the courtyard muffled under armed soldiers footsteps as each brick sreams death , as there boots press crimson into the cracks with conviction ... imprisoned in there minds , unable to think of anything other then dieing , or killing , generals filling there heads with misery , telling them its Victors who write history , is your name VICTOR ??? conflicted tore through there enlistment notice , its then they noticed that the richest family names were never listed ...

database erased , decipher cypher's ,splitting fibre optical wires , inside the matrix playing tron on his ROM , before he shutsdown , need a reboot , to feel refreshed n regroup ,step out of virtual reality , mortals kombat fatality, feeling like life is lacking dimensions , cutting dope with jesus , saying i think its time for a divine intervention ....

alpha to omega ,mega man to sega , overload ya data, overlord of vader, overwrite over life, pick real over hype , pick steel over knife , pick fields grown with light , bright enough to blind the hunger for knowledge ,and cast shadows on a higher power trying to absolve it , heres the problem , noone asked you a question and your trying to solve it ... does it matter ? liquid ,plasma, gas or solid ?




so anyway , in new news , NOONE CARES DLC

talking to me like im slaughterhouse...
its time for you to MOVE ON
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Gliitch
 
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Reply Fri 3 May, 2013 03:28 pm
Tisk tisk, Whitey and Prof... You two have always been a great team. Do not argue or fight over a simple verse! Be friends.

Anyways...

Circs

Circles runnin in em
No fun in spittin venom
When you're gonna get em
But you're pinned and ridden
Like a pig in rhythm
Sittin written **** is liftin
Lippin wishes thinkin
With the threatened bets are set
I get no regrets to fret
Upon, I've donned like Shaun con.
Or khan, in a bun o' fun
Well I'm done here hun, gotta run
Guns go off and on
They remind me to be free
When I'm gone

Truth glued you to a new booth
It's this pit of iffy ****
Yo don't know no show
Like Poe I'll grow and go
Toe to toe to you
It's true, though blue
As the ocean itself
You noticed this hell
As a potent pit-well
And a rodents lit shell
Yah you're rats
Cats and bats
Eat you like that
Dinner, that's
You, yeah
Ya knew
It true
Two
To
U

(Chorus)
Shotgun shells gonna give them hell
But I can tell you miss me

Pocket fill with our Freewill
But I know still you miss me

(Verse2)
Choppin like a blade
Poppin like a 'nade
Rockin on the stage
And lockin like a cage
Rippin up the face
Grippin for the lace
Shipping for the race
And slippin at the base
Yknow what I love in me?
I'm obsessed with symmetry
It really aint much of a kin to me
But I think it's an undissed free be
To believe and it's like I've got an OCD
Notice these lines finish in a line, my kind
Of rap, perfect flows and perfect time, rhyme
And ladder to climb, up, but we are almost down
Okay let get this town, to spin lots, jump aroun
Falling the calling it's bawling and small see
It tilting and wilting like filling its building
It is willing, to be thrilling, for chilling
Stories of gory glory it bores me
It's pouring more flooring to
Run about. Jump around
Not g-gonna go there
I d-d-d-don't care
It's not unfair
To bear
Stare
Care
Air
..
.
And break the chain! No pain! Are ya bane or Bruce Wayne, my brain is insane, here's the joker for ya, I'm all over the crazy train!

(Chorus)
Rockets pop and bodies rock
Yet I can't stop insisting

Feelin blue i can't unglue
I know it's true you miss me

Shocks in the body, rockin for the lotty
Put the shotty in the lobby
(Let them feel what I can't deal
And it is real, you miss me)

Like a Bugatti gotta drop heat
Like a beat in the hot seat
(You can grow on those you show
And now i know you miss me)

(Ooooh, oh-ooooooh, oh-ooooooh!
Oh-oooooooh!)
Lip singers! Sip drinkers!
(Let them get it and repeat
It is lit, you miss me)

(Ooooh, oh-oooooh, oh-ooooooh!
Oh-ooooooh!)
(Sadness madness gladness)
(Didn't you miss me?)

Oooooh, oh-oooooh oh-oooooooh!
Oh-oooooooh!
(Repeat repeat repeat)
(Am I what's missing?)

Oh... Oh... Oooooooh...
(defeat! Defeat! Defeat!)
(I miss you)

Sandman, show mercy-
These peeps be thirsty
Are them peeps worthy
Or did they come too early
Show mercy.

(Chorus)
Despite the fright
Delight you miss me

Write the rights
You fight you miss me

Love oh love oh love

Love of clouds above

Love oh love oh love

Take me down...


It's an older one of mine, probably my favorite
theprofessor
 
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Reply Fri 3 May, 2013 03:38 pm
@Gliitch,
nice structure : ) i like the bane or bruce wayne lines
Gliitch
 
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Reply Fri 3 May, 2013 03:51 pm
@theprofessor,
Thanks

I usually incorporate speed rap, like the beginning of verse 1 and beginning/end of verse 2
theprofessor
 
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Reply Fri 3 May, 2013 04:15 pm
@Gliitch,
thats cool

a tip alotta people do double time
as eminem displayed its posible to do triple time

if you want to stand out learn how to go half time an double time

and triple if you can

its great practice

i know people usually see me set at highspeed in raps , but honestly flows sound better with switch ups

look at yelawolf

Gliitch
 
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Reply Fri 3 May, 2013 04:38 pm
@theprofessor,
I love Yelawolf, he's pretty awesome. Tech N9ne is one of my favs, except for Eminem of course
WhiteMofoMonkysmugla
 
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Reply Sat 4 May, 2013 03:51 am
@Gliitch,
Even just a switch in the rhyme scheme and what words you emphasize can change up your double time flow
WhiteMofoMonkysmugla
 
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Reply Sat 4 May, 2013 03:56 am
@WhiteMofoMonkysmugla,
And you can't forget quadruple time! Lol


http://youtu.be/bsZnE2uk05Y

9:30
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Illustraight
 
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Reply Sat 4 May, 2013 09:15 am
@theprofessor,
https://soundcloud.com/illustraight/circles

I sent this to a co-worker who happens to be a singer with her own studio.
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WhiteMofoMonkysmugla
 
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Reply Sat 4 May, 2013 02:45 pm
@King123,
King

Punch lines-5/10
Wordplay-4/10
Metaphors- 4/10
Multi syllables - 2/10
Structure 4/10

19/50

The night vision line and the star blown up nova thing impressed me

Nova

Punch lines- 3/10
Wordplay- 3/10
Metaphors- 2/10
Multi syllables 3/10
Structure 3/10

14/50

The we ain't down for your **** thing was cool and the night vision rebuttal was nice but you went wayyyyyy out of the structure for it and so did some of your other lines you let them run on too long





Don't take these judgings to heart I judge hard
thedarknova
 
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Reply Sat 4 May, 2013 04:59 pm
@WhiteMofoMonkysmugla,
well originally it was going to be vocallized on a diss track which is why a lot of lines look run on but whateva man i respect yah judging
 

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