Neverending Rap Battle

well put a verse up motha fucka then tell me im basic bitch i dont see any of your **** pussy

1. In my opinion, when practising alliteration, about 7 times out of 10 there doesn't need to be a flow, neither half of the time does there need to be multies. It's called EXPERIMENTING.
2. If you think the read was "too long", you should go back a few pages and take a look at my 300-bar verse, which is by far the BIGGEST challenge I have ever set myself in my years of writing!
3. Touchdown on the creativity and vocab marks.
4. This is a pretty, if not mixed, review. So thanks a lot for this.

I will take your advice, however, and record this in due time.

WOW.. ok PROF and NOVA... idk why im gonna do this.. i just feel you guys took what he or it is saying.... i mean Calm the **** down.... its 1 guy.. not the whole damn world.. peolpe will have opionions (i cant spell) **** it.... i mean usually i wont have reacted the same.. but being on RR and listening to shutdown.. tought he a lesson... that lesson is that there will always be someone that will judge... now prof i for one loved the verse... but thats me... king had a different opionion.... he made it more complex tho.... i dont know why.. but i felt like i had to address this....its just advice... and feed back... shutdown told me never take **** to hard when people tell you something you dont want to here... he said just simply say thanks for your opionion.. even tho it angers you... and just simply move on... hope both of you read this....

im simply giving you advice
and if that makes you mad.. then so be it
cause i was just trying to help

ok then??.. giving you my thoughts.. you dont have to go insane about it??? damn

chaos knows no tranquil days, pressure tends to strangulate
gotta full plate, I contemplate, too much to do, procrastinate
see clearest when I medicate, those that will, I let them hate
levitate to meditative state, lessen the weight, as I drift away

on my way to euphoric state, visualize from new perspective
simple details ignored before, become noticeably impressive
pay attention and listen now that I am focussed more clearly
as to avoid potential nightmares by losing what i hold dearly

strained relations, test of patience, how much of it, can I take
world crumbling around me, but no reports of any earthquakes
always real, never fake, truth in my words, make no mistake
must maintain, 2 much at stake, eyes open even before I wake

karma is fate, I can't complain, hard enough just staying sane,
bright sunrays, claim days, following the darkest, harshest rain
pain sustains with it's stubborn ways, and scars it leaves behind
only safe place I can think to hide is deep inside my twisted mind

im saying it one cuz i didnt ask him to go on judging me and 2 simply cuz i want to battle some one

by the looks of his feed back.. he wasnt judging you
he just stated the beat over powered your voice.. and then he called the lyrics.. basic
not you
i mean he was just helping you guys

and you and prof went crazy on him.. i didnt get that
i normally would have just laughed but then shutdown told me how to take criticism

and you called him a pussy... and you called him out.. on making not posting anything and i think he just answered it... if you read it

you want to battle ( call him out on battling)... and if he doesnt want to.. then i will

(tbh idk what im fuckin sayin.. im not smart when it comes to judging ****.. **** it.... im out)

you wanted a verse.. you got one.. i already posted it

wow

all i have to say

The most honest opinions are the ones you don't ask for and if you didn't want anyone's opinion you never would have posted it and you would have kept it to yourself you're just upset you didn't get an opinion you liked if he had of said it was amazing you wouldn't have said nobody asked you or **** off what do you know you would have said thank you so don't get your panties in a bunch when people don't think you're amazing I honestly agreed with everything he said although as for profs lyrics that's his opinion I don't believe he fully grasps what prof does in his verses and if he actually heard the way it's spit he would understand the flow and structure better ive known prof for multiple years and still it is sometimes hard to grasp his concepts because they are well hidden if king had been around longer he probably would have seen profs verse for more than the words he reads

Multis and you're set you grasp meaning in verses and you can structure it well with syllable counts and such multis will help the flow idk how you spit it but it was choppy the way I read it

well does he have audios??

if so i could check out some of those

theres a difference between reading a verse.. and hearing one

I believe he meant a battle verse though

i mean if he wants to battle i will.. i never really expected them to go insane over feedback

but if its a battle he wants... ask and you shall receive

well he never said he was battling me.. he said he wanted to battle someone

Yes lots

https://soundcloud.com/milkboxkids

By "put a verse up" he was probably referring to battling

ok.. cool i'll check them out now

i'm working on a verse

i gonna make it 4 bars for now.. if thats cool?

OK thedarknova

Before I even Start to Offend Him... He should know I'm the type to start Partin his Tendons..
Voters'll say "King caught a Spark of Momentum n left dark shook...like Parkinson Syndrome!

This is Predator-Prey, Your Better you Say? I'm too Clever to Slay! I'll Sever this Fake's Heart!
See this Veteran Stays Sharp n puts "RTM at the bottom, in text" ...Registered Trademark!

Keystyle or writtens...I've been known-to-text-nice, but if dark comes off top and "bugs out" it's head-lice!/
Your crew's **** without a chosen-vet's-might! But I'd rather "Keep your Click(Clique) on hold" like a frozen-website!/

dark has the Insane,-unruly-flow! So dark, you couldn't "burn a Pro, Tool" settin' flame-to-studios!/
No one on Redemption thinks this lame-is-truly dope! If he's this "high on the card" again, it's his game-of-Yu-Gi-Oh!/

Happy?

Intro: sometimes happiness comes in short bursts of emotion revealed by people of particular interest... But if we become a slave to this feeling are we really happy? We need to realize happiness shouldn't be temporary it should last a long time

Verse 1:
I'm chained and shackled didn't brace my ankles I fell head over heels
I've been in love but purpose is something I'm never gon feel
Hell's Kitchen and still ain't got a pot to piss in
today was **** but at least I got tomorrow to fix it
I'm sittin here praying one day ill be your last kiss
When you've been fingered 5 nights of the past six
By 5 guys I wish I was actually fakin but it's a factual statement
Shes a whore but I love her as much as I wanna start smackin this Asian
Treat you like a gold while you getting parted at the thighs
Every ounce of effort I've put in is just another part of my demise
But letting go of you isn't really scary at all
I'm just afraid I won't have the energy to stand if I fall
Some of my best moments were with you in the hot sun
But I won't waste energy on a short walk I got a long run
If the puzzles incomplete ill find that little piece
I cant stress on a note I got a whole symphony
Sometimes I feel like more gets said the less we speak
Wont get caught in the river there's an ocean ahead of me
Ill never let my smile drop if I'm losin
Ill Never let the flow of nature stop evolution