Neverending Rap Battle

How CAN'T you?

Rip it out ya the chest and insert it in ya ass crack

it didnt make sense because it had nothing to do with me besides the basement thing....everything was trash talk basically....and if you can explain your verse line by line...and explain the reference of your bars...than i'd be impressed..but to me its not a diss verse..its trash talk...and what was the potato line in your first verse...cause i didnt see it

Awkward moment when you find out china Ginas a lesbian LOL

Who?

Hey VejaDu! Don't get cocky (I learned that the hard way)

lmfao for real ???

Lol guys watch the real mitt Romney on funny or die! SFF

Yes lol she texts me saying "I'm sorry I've been so distant from you I honestly love you and you were my first true love and I'll always have that with you but I think I'm a lesbian and as much as I love spending time with you we can't be anything more than friends I need to see where this path takes me" LOL I started crying of laughter

Idk if it's just me but I'd rather her be with a girl than another guy lol

About to smoke and scare some kids, so I only have time for Wrathe. I'll get with you later, Prof.

I'll blaze you like I'm in my killing phase,
then get blazed until my eyes are veiled with haze.
Wake up among celestial entities,
laughing senselessly with stolen identities.
I should be a chef, I know the perfect recipe
for world-class flows for mental remedy.
My lyrics light liquid fires like sparks,
leaving you in the ground like tire marks.
I could use you for a psychology project,
a living example of child neglect.
I'd say don't feel bad; the blame should be on your deadbeat dad.
But I don't feel sympathy for cowards roughened like shoulder pads.
Like I'm flashing down streets, I speed at a green light,
drifting at any obstacles, annihilating anyone in sight.
Learn your role and sell your soul,
I'll own your rights like gun control.
Smoke a bowl and drown some drinks,
I'm living high like I'm the Sphinx.
My flows give off chills as I write and rhapsodize;
I am a weaver and graffiti artist as I vandalize.
I'm stepping up this rap ladder like I'm a CEO.
Jokers like you belong at a cabaret show.
Terrorists seek me out like soccer moms with minivans.
I pack more heat and bombs than warfare in Pakistan.

some stuff is basic..but all in all pretty cool verse in my opinion

What lines are basic? I'd like to know what I can improve on.

No offense but basically all of them your symmettry between bars is terrible it's all one syllable rhyme structures and your only punches are irrelevant similes

My lyrics light liquid fires like sparks,
leaving you in the ground like tire marks.

I could use you for a psychology project,
a living example of child neglect.
This bar doesn’t rhyme

Basic bar

Like I'm flashing down streets, I speed at a green light,
drifting at any obstacles, annihilating anyone in sight.

Learn your role and sell your soul,
I'll own your rights like gun control.

I'm stepping up this rap ladder like I'm a CEO.
Jokers like you belong at a cabaret show.

Terrorists seek me out like soccer moms with minivans.
I pack more heat and bombs than warfare in Pakistan.

Your verse was good…and if you want advice..i’m not really that good at giving it…ask, bambi, whitey. Prof, illstraight and of course the rap god wrathe lol (just kidding)

just improve your rhyme scheme....read your first few lines

I'll blaze you like I'm in my killing phase,
then get blazed until my eyes are veiled with haze.
Wake up among celestial entities,
laughing senselessly with stolen identities.
I should be a chef, I know the perfect recipe
for world-class flows for mental remedy.

this was pretty cool...try making a verse like this

Almost half my lines were more than one syllable. What do you mean by symmetry? Lastly, none of my similes were irrelevant since they all complemented the sentence they were structured with. Unless you mean that they don't make sense, which I'd be happy to explain.

They are still one word endings which any person can do elevate to actual schemes like more than just one word at the end, you use too many big words trying to connect them together it sounds a lot better when you can rhyme them otherwise you sound like a walking dictionary


Similes are fine but your overusing them any rap piece should only have 2 possibly 3 similes (this is for like a 16 bar verse) because the word "like" can get very repetitive very fast try to incorporate wordplay and metaphors instead of simile similes plus similes are easy since its a simple comparison metaphors and Wordplay are harder because they cause you to think twice Which is ultimately the goal of any rapper

Mad by symmetry your rhymes are very off beat like if you rap them out they come out awkwardly this may just be your flow but that's what it looks like from what I've seen

First one saying u aint ever been layed
Flip cuz u said i was kia
Saying ull die like a puss
Saying ihave been in a fight and u just fight with ur parents cuz u always rap about how u hate ur mom
Me being weird
Ur scared of my sternum now lol
saying stop saying ur bad ur an emo twlight fan u aint fooling any1
Uve never baeen laid and it connects to how u said ur internet and cable went down
Expand ur horizons but it conected to the last line
Gaining expereience unlike u is what that ment
Saying ur that on person in our fam everyone hates (not true though)
Sayin ur whiny
Saying if u went whining like that in my hood ud get gang banged
Sayin imma but **** u with potatoes
Ur as soft as a babie
Sayin u mother **** u , cuz ur mother fucked u

I said immabe coming for dat ass and cummin for dat ass

this did nothing to me...you didnt even reply to me...