Thanks for the corrections but I'm not really sure what you're correcting?
Did you try to make what I wrote more concise and precise?
I understand why you'd eliminate personally--redundancy, and changed some things for clarity, but why split my sentence and start a second. Is the sentence too long and therefore unclear? I don't think it's a run-on?
Why did you split the two independent clauses in the second sentence with a semi-colon? Was that also for clarity? Or is it "better" not to use commas in such situations?
Is it bad form to mix "whether" and "if" in the same sentence? I'd think because you pretty much started a new sentence with the semicolon, "whether" and "if" awkwardly being together in the same sentence isn't an issue? But maybe "if" is just wrong in that context and "whether" is better?
I'm a fussbudget too so it's okay.