UnKnOwN SoLjA wrote:I aint a crab dawg, but i got a "snap" 2 my wordz,
n i aint a blood, but i bleed red when im cut by u herbz//
Rarely im touched by u nerdz, ud b lucky to conquer dis superb,
ive been around to observe n witness u wanna bz shrink 2 barely obscured//
U think wut u heard wuz dat heat? well like nelly i aint aimin for #3,
when i spit a key, u niggas quick 2 flee cuz envy get u high like extacy//
flex-wit-me? trus me when i say u-cant-g, most u catz cant stand next-2-me,
let alone mess-wit-me, test-me-b, and watch me leave u in da dirt left-2-bleed//
Yes-i-succed, at wut i do cuz i im rawer den flesh-2-teenz, im da best-it-seemz,
yall diagonal like base-ball-seamz, cuz i dont need 2 stand on a hill 2 proove u less-den-me//
im still da best-2-be, up-2-date im a "war vet", call me da "purple heart" da way i top-da-hate,
stop-muh-fate? impossible...im tha day after 2morro n trus me ur doom-awaitz//
After re-readin' you're spit here's my explaination just to show you I know what I'm talkin' about and Not dickridin'
Structure: you're structure was alright, it wasn't the best. Some lines were longer than the other which ruins you're flow in a text rap. If it was audio it would be more clearer. cause you would control you're breaths between words and that would speak for itself, but for a text rap you're structure could of been better.
Overall - 7/10
Flow: You're flow was nice, I liked some lines (flow was nice) but some were kinda long, like i said it kinda ruined you're flow. but overall you're flow was nice.
Overall - 9/10
Multies/vocab: I'm puttin' these together cause these go well together.. but as for you're multies, flowed nicly off the tounge, Keep up with that ****, nice multies...
Overall on multies- 8.5/10
BUT you're vocab could of been upped here, big, Try stay away from words like 'nerds' there's a better word to discribe people. Upp the vocab and combine that with you're multies and you got that **** on point. so vocab is okay
Overall on Vocab - 5/10
Average that out. Overall - bout a 6/10
Wordplay: okay now this is the point where you could pick up you're game, cause you're wordplay is vauge, try make you're wordplay so clear you don't have to type a paragrah to explain a bar.. Like some of you're wodplay doesn't make sense unless you explain it through paragraphs, so get that wordplay on point and to the tee. overall you're wordplay has potential to hit hard, just set it up better. just pick up you're game on that, aight...
Overall - 6-7/10
Punches: Yo, I have to admit some of you're lines are nice punches, but like i said about you're wordplay some of it is vague, punches aren't meant for people to think long and hard on it, its suppost to be straight and on point. quik and hit hard.. try do that...... overall you're punches were nice/good.
Overall - 7-8/10
Enjoyment: Now I'm speakin' on opinion on this topic, but I liked you're verse but I've seen you do better than this spit.... you're other raps, wordplay was good, and punches were good... I like this verse but I also didn't like the verse....
My overall ratin' in this verse is a 6.5-7/10.. that's averagin' out..
don't say I dickride bro..don't say that ****..I speak for myself..
