Neverending Rap Battle

is this a good punchline?

i am that man who can even rhyme an article
you,you are not a man,you got no male's particle
you are she-male

im a whole different cat , in combat ... flyer then a wombat flying in yo moms ass with koniak .. **** her so hard she loose her contacts .. im harrrd ... blood flowing from my hearrrtt.... im going to climb the charts ... an graffiti my art like a totem pole ... its protocol I told um all before I showed um all ...everyone thinks ur nuts when your showing balls , so involved ,with how your gonna ball people think you wont evolve ... then you show brains like open skulls ....
im going sane ... everyone throw my name ... till they go insane , when they go n say , you aint gonna stay , stay going till they going mane ... He aint stoppin ..poppin novacaine over open veins keeps on flowin flame ... they keep barking n showing fangs ... ima keep sparkin them potent thangs...do mo important thangs ...like poke a throat well i hold her bangs ...man lotta things i done overcame... but I always pick real over fake ... culminate with those who cultivate ,in an altered state married the game an sacraficed her virginity ...gave birth 2 an immaculate concept you aint fuckin with this divinity ...similies symmetry synergy sinner g inner being infiniti unlike like my sympathy simply for tempting me ... my vision you tinting me ... soon i wont be able to see what you meant to me ,cementing my reasoning cant think sensibly.. if it doesnt make sense to you , u aint worth a cent ta me ..im a Beast fueled by instincts and sensory ...**** anyone that thinks they can censor me ... learn from past century's focus thyne energy's ...center chi n if its meant to be its meant to be ..

not really think more funny any attack rather than something people have to think out ... people prefer easily apparent disses ... its all in the delivery

Anyone put in a verse that fits in the two available spaces. More that one person can, I'll just pick the best one.



Until The Day I Die

(Intro)
It could be tomorrow. Maybe ten years from now. I'm ready.
But why not hit it on the way?
(Beat starts)

(Verse 1)
Roll my bars through some hot coals/
A pot of gold, melted around my bars, form a soft mold/
Gold bars or not, bro?/
Opposite of off snow/
Blunt as pot sold at the car show/
Where hot rods and long nosed formula ones and lambos/
Set off in line, timeless without a time limit, neon trails and a hot glow/
Until the cops show and they take off like the Broncos/
During Autumn, off season and on low/
Treading water like an oblong boat/
Or a rock skipped, but pa, no/
It's a rocket that takes off, yo/
Basically what I'm saying to ya is that my words and rhymes are not cold/
If it's not so, ima cock my aug and close shop until I knock knock off the lost ark and become all talk/
till I'm hot/
til I'm top/
til I'm global, noble, immobile like a rock/
Til time stops and the clock drops/
Til I'm finally wrong/
Til I don't make a single dime on a song/
Til I won't shock/
Til kazzer returns and my tazer is off/
Til I'm led to the slaughter/
Til I'm not chopped, and just sidewalk/
Stepped on and marked with SOS's and chalk talk/

(Main)
Until when this planet wants to spit me out/
Until this wicked **** is getting venomous now/
Until why I can't release something that doesn't form crowds/
And until what I'm doing leads to one last bow, asking how/

(Feat. Verse)

(Main)
Until I can spit a whole rap in one line/
Until I read minds, and remind, I change time/
Until I can't double back flip on the mic with my words/
And until I assure that my verse is absurd/

(Verse 3)
Yeah, until I can list off my hitlist in a verse/
Until I find every last piece and lift up the curse/
Until I'm no longer skeletal, hellbent on sellin ya out/
While I'm bending the nouns/
Benefit of no doubt/
Pretending I'm loud/
But I'm just whispering into a megaphone, (every pint of energy left in a shout)/
Hey! (Endless helplessness sent and meant to arouse/
Hey! (But less sentiment and bent on death is what it's about)/
Hey! (Rest all alone) on heaven's pullout couch!/

(Main)
Until I sprout wings and see being that exist in my dreams/
Until I'm beamed up and screened into the D-day beach scene/
Until I'm left laughing at a joke that no one else heard/
Until soundwaves freeze and the last schism occurred-/

(Feat. Verse)

(Bridge)
Until "why me"/
Until "try me!"/
Until my teeth/
fall out and I'm beat!/
Until then, ima keep shooting back/
Tell me to clean up my act, you'll see my foot in your ass/
That's a fact!/

(Outro)
Any minute. Any second. Even now.
That's all.

I just wanna right my ways , right away , writin day night n day ,day light plays
days like today , dazed might a blazed ,type to graze with those who misbehave .. type a grave look that kills nags ... kill kegs ...pop the pill bags open .. dope n never needed a placebo pill or needle filled to believe it ... bleed it ...look around no ones taking responsibility , so the number 2's leading ...the 3's ..an... our fore fathers leaven ... alot of treason ... but what truths growing from the seed in eden ?...lotta keefers keefin , cheechers cheechin ...reapers reaping making a killing off it ... lotta villians still in office .. civilians, millions an billions watch this .. as Companies turn your blood toxic ....polute your waters ... kill n slaughter , every mother father son daughter for product sales ... earths an industry you get fired if the Prophets fail....locked in hell n im not talking bail ...go ahead n yell fer god im talksin belzebub ...

Make 'em bars like i work in a jail factory/
i ain't Rick Ross, so it's better if you don't ask me/
Breakaway from earth, what a soul can be/
i seeth my teeth in it, till it's satifactory/
She jealous of her sister, that's a Dirty Laundry/
Started from the bottom like Mr Aubrey/
Fighting without fists, i'm Mahatma Gandhyy/
My lines will eat you coz my flow is hungry/
I'm a stone in a rough, peep the diamond in my mind/
I'm always at the front, i never come from behind/
In case you've forgotten, time for you to rewind/ and for me to remind/
you, that i'm pac, jiggy-biggie and nasty combined/
plus my dick is the Achilles of mankind/
watch as it stands and the pussy recline/
I'm the last regiment, i'm rust-resistant/
I try, i ball, i ball and try again, just persistant/
I stay away from defeat like the horizon in the distant/
I got no boss but i'm vice like Chancellor/
They resort to me like i'm from Zanzibar/
I give hard solutions like a vernier calliper/
i'm a rebel like the chinese calender/
My subconcious is 90 and 90, equiangular/
I tell the truth and stab lie in the gastrovascular/
rappers love me, i hang in their cribs like a royal great grandmother/
I just spit it from my mind, one word at the time/
Take everything I'm going through and put it in a rhyme/
You're solvent, so watch me sublime, subliminally/
or be like joker and atone for crimes criminally/
but i don't joke around, at work is where i be/
Customer is king, that is what these hoes be telling me/
I just take my shoe matcher (schumacher) and pretend like it's grand prix/
a beast with the mic, just call me an emcee

everybody dead ?

nah son we getting it popping

well I ain't seeing much poppin

Someone reply to my last post D:

im always poppin just not always poppin here lolol ...

relaxxxx

noone wants to dance with the devil , I put that bitch on the stripping pole
flipping dro , to flipping flows , ripping shows , RIP dem Foes ...
still is alive ... Realest alive ?? kendrick when i pen ****
bitch dont kill my vibe...magazine in my hand , I feel this VIBE
Hip hop dont accept no bitch talk keep ya lips locked ziplocked
no matter how high I git , im always down..spit flocks. git bach'd
you chickens get bocked
chickenheads get cocks
dick heads git blocked
girl just lied to me .. said mike your so live , if we werent together something would die in me... she use to scream god like a me a diety ... itching for brains think she was Ivy league ...but I cant be played , player I coach the game...
most rappers couldnt be dope wit coke in there veins ...u can get Pop'd
pepsi or coke .
your so duh same ...sweet ima supernova bang, ur sugar , novacaine ,
I know my homes Nova cane...aint much we caint do
you can take 1, picture me on take two , relax take two
we make moves , moves turn to movies
we take dubs , dubs turn to dubies
we take subs turn the Music UP
dont give a ****
but thats my seat
I wont give it up
in rhymes mental asylum
sick as ****
your bitch as pup
**** your old ass im ******* ur bitches pups
got 3 drugs an three girls for a pick me up
music industry I picked you for a pity ****
think im horsein around , stampede gitty up
found atlantis , time to bring my city up
money honeys funny when you bring my city up
bummy slummy crummy when you bring my city up
hungry munchies yummy when you bring my city up
got kids sippin surp outta sippy cups
gittin skirts outta there shirts for dixie cups
pixie sluts pretty butts pretty much every month
a new one period , I aint waiting 5 days
to drop a flow unlike these pussies ...
you aint serious
hearing this
here in this
judgeing by when my next hearing is
u copy cats aint mirror this
just twice as pussy
and i aint like that pussy
im wherever the mics at pussy
tight ass , bend over grrrl I might bite that tooshie

poppin everywhere
hell yeah

A top starter I rock harder no cop farther then a block ,******
I'll mop ya arteries wit cartridges of suasages wen you stop. Sucker
Idk

* My responses in blue.
Until The Day I Die

(Intro - Glitch)
It could be tomorrow. Maybe ten years from now. I'm ready.
But why not hit it on the way?
(Beat starts)

(Verse 1 - Glitch)
Roll my bars through some hot coals/
A pot of gold, melted around my bars, form a soft mold/
Gold bars or not, bro?/
Opposite of off snow/
Blunt as pot sold at the car show/
Where hot rods and long nosed formula ones and lambos/
Set off in line, timeless without a time limit, neon trails and a hot glow/
Until the cops show and they take off like the Broncos/
During Autumn, off season and on low/
Treading water like an oblong boat/
Or a rock skipped, but pa, no/
It's a rocket that takes off, yo/
Basically what I'm saying to ya is that my words and rhymes are not cold/
If it's not so, ima cock my aug and close shop until I knock knock off the lost ark and become all talk/
till I'm hot/
til I'm top/
til I'm global, noble, immobile like a rock/
Til time stops and the clock drops/
Til I'm finally wrong/
Til I don't make a single dime on a song/
Til I won't shock/
Til kazzer returns and my tazer is off/
Til I'm led to the slaughter/
Til I'm not chopped, and just sidewalk/
Stepped on and marked with SOS's and chalk talk/

(Main)
Until when this planet wants to spit me out/
Until this wicked **** is getting venomous now/
Until why I can't release something that doesn't form crowds/
And until what I'm doing leads to one last bow, asking how/

(Verse 2 - Illustraight)
I've lost my train of thought, my mind's raced ahead of me
There's a bridge out, and the motherfucking brakes are messy
Why the **** would I want to think about dying?
Too busy thinking about dimes with images whiter than Indian rice
So bring me some spice, sweetie, make sure it has flavour in it
Along with a side of chicken curry and my favourite spinach
I need some iron to build me some strength
I'm feeling kind of weak, plus my dick has shrunk back to a despicable length
I'm a "Pussy Crook" like Mystikal says
I'm a crook who looks at the cootie, I want to stick a finger in there
before it sticks a finger at me
And a bush is not supposed to stick out
Let me beat it with my whip, pull my dick out
while I think about turning this chick out, burning this bitch down
I got the hose full of water, once I'm drenching this house then it drowns
And let it go down faster than a house of cards knocked
I'm a Chinese takeaway, she's chowing down my hard cock
She flouts and says it's top notch (water splash) ..... Hey, what the ****, Mum?
****, have I been dreaming? Must be the mug of hot choc


(Main)
Until I can spit a whole rap in one line/
Until I read minds, and remind, I change time/
Until I can't double back flip on the mic with my words/
And until I assure that my verse is absurd/

(Verse 3 - Glitch)
Yeah, until I can list off my hitlist in a verse/
Until I find every last piece and lift up the curse/
Until I'm no longer skeletal, hellbent on sellin ya out/
While I'm bending the nouns/
Benefit of no doubt/
Pretending I'm loud/
But I'm just whispering into a megaphone, (every pint of energy left in a shout)/
Hey! (Endless helplessness sent and meant to arouse/
Hey! (But less sentiment and bent on death is what it's about)/
Hey! (Rest all alone) on heaven's pullout couch!/

(Main)
Until I sprout wings and see being that exist in my dreams/
Until I'm beamed up and screened into the D-day beach scene/
Until I'm left laughing at a joke that no one else heard/
Until soundwaves freeze and the last schism occurred-/

(Verse 4 - ILLustraight)
Skip to my Lou, Louis, this ain't a nursery rhyme
But watch me hopscotch and make these cops hop with this lil' verse of mine
This little light of mine, they can't stand it
They all want to block my shine, goddamnit!
They all want me to take a leap without the faith
See me roll down that steep hill without skates (Bono!)
I still remain alive
You all really respect me, so you might as well cast your hate aside
Because I'm gonna keep living until the day I die

(Bridge - Glitch)
Until "why me"/
Until "try me!"/
Until my teeth/
fall out and I'm beat!/
Until then, ima keep shooting back/
Tell me to clean up my act, you'll see my foot in your ass/
That's a fact!/

(Outro)
Any minute. Any second. Even now.
That's all.

(ILLustraight)
Not my best verses, I freestyled them all the way through.

Cool bro

Found my itouch but they don't know my password
**** them, it's 0728 So you can lick my ass, YOU HEARD !!
Thought you was slick but you ain't even close in a longshot
Bitch ya ain't nothin think dat you sumthimg but your wrong Scott
Thought you could catch me redhanded right in the act
Sorry. But I planned this... A canvas wit a baseball bat
I was ready ..thought you could catch me off guard
Haha. Think you can catch me? Fooling YO dumass .,not hard
**** way you think I'm outtie goin to a group home
Can't take these dum mutha fuckers so I leave my shoes on
Goin places.
Knowing faces
**** you dad. You know your racist
Can't face this humiliation dat u gave us
Walkin out the front door without lookin back
Takin 4 steps n den I spit to show the respect I lack
You ain't nothing important so you better shut the **** up
I got other dads on line so you better SHUT THE **** UP
Bribing me den lying to me didn't make thinks much easier
But I'm finally gonna leave your ass by next Easter
Didn't finish. iPod about to die

focus on quotients quote um potent whats more important
pouring your heart out or your brains in her mouth
people think its hard now ...till u put crack in there pipe hard down
Oh My God ... what about yours ? did they shoot art down
painting a picture sicker elixer , the feeds hungry for another stars crown
king these checker playing for cheddar, cheese ,my records better
better record mecca hexa extra terrestrial sittin next ta celestial text
read what god just wept washing away mortal flesh ...

is this punchline good?

imma do-before-die dude,i do what i gotta do
while you devour diets,i be slaping **** outta you
:-p