Neverending Rap Battle

i aint gonna lie but dude i actually really liked this piece

this is my favorite line

Cause **** is serious, delirious how this day came about
Our guns or our Children, Which do we dare live without.

thats some real ****.. i like that
good stuff

I love how once it gets to a point when you know your wrong you don't respond to my responses lol

Good piece good message


Irrelivent but as far as gun laws go its kind of pointless because 98% of guns even ones legally owned were at one point illegally made and sold

If your hell bent on killing someone chances are you'll find a way to kill them gun or not

Overall I liked it but since you want feed back let or point out a few things

1. Complicate the schemes you rhymed some pretty generic words
2. Flip up the cadence throw in some double time or something just to change it up
3. Try throwing in more wordplay and **** make people go back and think twice what you said

Overall 8/10 good piece

I rap about guns an killing people to get people worked up and it obviously worked with you

You're simply an idiot if you take what I say serious


Other than that. the topic is irrelevant but the verse waa solid

There's two sides of being real

Tellling what has happend in your life and a story

And there's also a side where you can be real without actually rapping about serious ****. People like you jus need to lighten up and realiZe

I'm out

I knew somethin was missing

I gotcha

Downloadable content

Remember this next time you think your intelligent now bro lets be honest
Cuz you just take schemes and copy rappers like you downloaded their content
I bet your a suburb dude who says he had a rough home in the projects
And I bet it would be copyright infringement if you uploaded some content
You don't live this **** like we do homie you can't rock it with rappers
I bet your only passing college cuz you copy the answers
ur ink ain't fresh I scanned your paper And think u should stop wit the schemes
So face the fax/facts homie your nothing but a copy machine
Funny you have no product to move yet you use that name when your rhymin
Cuz even if downloadable content spit frees no one would buy it
Homie I have fucked you up multiple times imma put your writing on the shelf
Your the Miami cannibal only win battles by biting someone else
I'd **** you up son if we got locked in a cage
Cuz it's pretty straight forward your style is copy and paste
Ill make as many gay jokes as I want cuz with men you love butt sex
How the hell did you get into college son I fucked you up with one subject

A parallelogram is a shape that has 4 equal lines
While I'm going forward, you're going the opposite side
While I'm on the ladder to success, you're on the decline
And while I'm sick, you're full of **** just like a toilet with grime
While I'm racing ahead, you are falling behind
While I talk sense, you talk **** all of the time
How can you call yourself a God, a Dalai Lama of rhymes
when you're the complete OPPOSITE - a fawning swine?!
Talking about you're Yahweh, and an Allah of a kind
Whether Allahu Akbar (الله أكب "God is great") is something that the Muslims decide
You're not a Muhammad of rhyming, more like a Godfather of slime
While I'm a Don, a deadly mobster with awesome design
My lyrical structure is like a spinning sphere
It goes all around you, I'm talking 4 dimensions here
Sending your brain into another place of existence
Tear a hole through the sky like vents, make you disappear
"Like assassination, your fascination is decapitation"?
Sit back and watch this basket-cased
crazy bastard get wasted like a bag of ladies'
scat laid in the trash for the back-alley rats to taste
Or better yet, papier-mâché this rapper and paste him
on the mat like wallpaper and add a spate of plaster
so "DLC" looks set in his dastardly ways
of trying to diss me, so I reckon that's plan A cast away

[Yosemite Sam]
Ooooooh, I loathe that varmint!
I'll turn Ills into a gol-dang carcass!
'Cause I be the root'nest, toot'nest, shoot'nest
bad-ass cowboy from here to Cameroon
Dagnabbit
Now watch me deal with this damn rabbit
(*explosion*) Ooooooooh, gad-dammit!
Ya rackin' frackin' nazit-trap-a-roll
Slack backin' crackin' cantaloupe casserole!
Motherfuckin' ass sunuvajackal
Illustraight damn rapper always winnin' in battles
Rattle tattle skedaddle stand-up Marshall Mathers
Farmer Jack apple-swallowin' man, Crack-a-Jacker

do you know how it feels to be neglected, abused
embarrassed to win so my goal is to loss

All i see is faggets,
Is that what you call rapping? shake my head.. delirious..
I'll show how to rap, not fap maggets
Cos my raps are dangerous, ******* backwards class,
I'm back bastards.
Wanna mess with us; i mean me and my rapping tactics,
Cos my bars are undeniably galactic as extra-galatic,
They're the anti-climatic mass to your unreliably climatic ass,
You dick-less faggets, i will shag your prophylactic mom, this is just so.. ugg.. GOD-DAMN-IT!!

Ew, that was a disgusting excuse for a rap

Your moms tits xD

Eew, why would you say that!?

you're the type of kid to scream **** the police
when ya still have ya mothers fuckin nipple stuck in ya teeth

You say to many 'Eews' for my liking. Are you a girl or what?

You see what i mean by backward class,
I'm referring to faggets like you, who are just a walking mass,
Reversing events like when i was ******* ya mom up da ass.
Take your dads dick outta your ass and go back to middle-class.

Really? Taking the name from kid twist... Disgrace

It's just a name. Get over it. -_-

oooo watch out everyone this kid thinks hes a bad bitch !
oh my god how did I know he was gonna call me faggot?
you need to jot some **** that's original
you weren't fuckin my ma up da ass?
cause if ya were I would dragged you outta my house by ya pinky toe
the sickest flow, if ya think ya better than me, you wilin
I know I got you smilin, why you tryna fight it?
and why would I take my dads dick outta my ass? I like it
I just flipped the script, takin ya words, breakin um in half, I rip this ****
im comin for blood lust, aim for ya guts and up, so i suggest ya start shuttin ya lips up
cause yall know ill twist this kid up by his wrist and fist and shove both of um his butt

whole thing is dope

you're right, last line

OHHH SHITTTT