Neverending Rap Battle

Yo, 8etude left

Good

What is good?

m leavin this page,i will be back when i'll improve my self it would approximately tak 1 month bt before i go i wanna ask a question to bambino n whitey,question is that what is lackin in my rap?imean i use multies n similies,punchlines than what else is needed?plz tell me how can i improve,i would b thankful to yo

Style. Ur own writtens. SMART punch lines. Useful raps that have meaning. Grammar. Flow. Things people can relate to. To leave

quote:i'ma chew u up,giv yo slush-mum a skull-fucck n spit u out in her bump'd-puss(pus-sy)9 months later yo r reproduct'd isnt it smart punchline?

You don't use multis half the time you barely even rhyme any similes and punches you make are retarded and barely make sense

whiteslim, you're just another Slim Shady copy. As was "slim shadey" and "newslimshady".

How many carbon Slims must get told
that if you keep emulating, then you will be folded?
Eminem did say this in "Emulate"
but I don't think anyone's paying attention to what he's saying ......

You need more than jus one or two good punch lines

Whiteslim=8etude

Real gangstas don't brag about being one.

thanx

That's why peeps like lil Wayne are fake as **** getting arrested for weapon charges and **** you're finally in a position when you don't have to do that kind of **** to provide for yourself yet you throw away a couple years of your career over stupid ****

Actions speak louder than words

gunshots speak louder than words

CAPS LOCK SPEAKS LOUDER THAN WORDS

the scream of ya mother when I was fuckin her is louder than words

whaddup bitch

Whoa back, Bambi. Whoa .... back.

Duh, Bambs and Ills are gay
They like sleeping in a bed with Rick Ross having two-ways
like R. Kelly
Stop rapping already, you're not ready
I'm Michael Myers armed with machetes
I will cut you open and string you like hot spaghetti
Derp, South Park is my favourite show
I'll get Cartman to crap on you hoes
and get Kenny to be killed just so his ghost can scare you pro's
Master P, I'm the one with the Tank
Uuuuuugh, I stick you with a shank
Watch you fall over and wank
You're all a bunch of sillies
Playing with each other's willies
I snigger and laugh at you Muttley's
You're all dogs, go home to your mummies
Derp, you're all twerps
I vomit on you, hurrrp!
Now tell me you're sick
You don't like my rap, bitches can suck my dick

leave ya with a broke back
ask heath ledger
he knows what that's like
pass the mic
assanine
rappin fine
killin mcs
nine at a time
add a line
I need a sniff
ya ass is mine
read it bitch
eat my ****
beat ya kids
with kleets and bats
we beefin in fact
the weed in the back
high as ****
i rhymin punk
so back off
im bout to knock ya hat off
and swing ya like a rag doll
and ride out
cause im out

thatd be a three way bitch
cause we gay as ****
we play with our dicks
least it aint a pussy ya rookie
**** machetes
i got swords
bitch im ready
suckin ya clit
cause bars are ****
more than arsenic
i set fire on fire
rankin just keeps getting higher and higher
**** bein sick, i got ya sweatin all night its worse
i don't think i saw one muli in ya verse
it hurts to see someone suck dick so bad
it whick whick whack
thanks for callin me a pro
i appreciate it
we done made it
take the shank ya "stuck me with"
and **** ya bitch
im the realest ish
dodgin ya fecies ya throwin at me
i don't need to see ya ****