@ida2,
ida2 wrote:
At last, I was convinced to go to the capital. It was a challenging trip. Because of my respiratory problem, the Airline Company didn’t allow me to fly. They wanted their reliable physician examined me and confirmed that I could bear flying. Even if their physician gave us permission to fly, a nurse must accompany me during the flight. All this process lasted for a couple of weeks. However, getting permission from the hospital was so easy, because the doctor knew me before.
Ultimately, the appointed day came. Although I was supposed to be accompanied by an experienced nurse, I was worried about flying. I thought I would have serious respiratory problem in such a height. But fortunately, everything went very well and I arrived at the hospital completely healthy.
Next day, the doctor took me to the operating room for a bronchoscopy. He examined my trachea carefully and found that it wasn’t in a better condition. After operation, he came to my room in the ward and spoke to me and my parents. We were not pleased with what we were hearing, but the doctor had a suggestion for us!
He offered me to put a new kind of tube into my trachea instead of a tracheostomy tube. He explained that the new tube, called T-tube, had three branches, one of them was placed into the top section of trachea. In this way, air could flow through the larynx, and vocal cords would vibrate; consequently, it was possible to speak. Besides, with a T-tube I could breathe through my nose; with a tracheostomy tube I could just breathe directly through the tube, therefore the inhalation air was so dry.
What a suggestion he was offering to me! I would able to speak after five years.
I was worried about this new experience, though I couldn’t ignore the ability to speak. Therefore, I accepted to try the new tube.
The doctor informed me that I might not bear the T-tube, hence I should not be so hopeful. He advised me to consider the following operation just as trying my luck; otherwise, I might be disappointed.
Two days later, I was taken to the operating room again and after I came around, I found myself in my room with a new feeling. I was breathing through my nose. What a pleasant feeling! It seemed I could bear the tube easily.
The doctor kept me hospitalized for more three days to make sure I wouldn’t have any problem. However, I couldn’t speak yet. Just some ambiguous voices were heard from the bottom of my larynx. Yet it was natural; I had not used my vocal cords for almost five years and in fact, they were asleep. It took time to wake them gradually.
Then, I was released from the hospital and got back home. As the doctor had predicted, I would able to speak after a couple of months. However, because of the problem with my spinal cord, my diaphragm and respiratory system were so weak; as a result, I couldn’t speak normally. In the same breathe, I could express just three words and with a very low voice. Though, it was better than nothing.
After all, the ability to speak provided me with a wonderful chance!
A question:
Can I say, “I couldn’t withdraw from ability to speak.” Instead of “I couldn’t ignore the ability to speak.”
At last, I was convinced to go to the capital. It was a challenging trip. Because of my respiratory problem, the
airline
company didn’t allow me to fly. They wanted their reliable physician
to examine me and confirm[...] that I could bear flying. Even if their physician
had given us permission to fly, a nurse
would have had to accompany me during the flight. All this process lasted for a couple of weeks. However, getting permission from the hospital was so easy, because the doctor knew me
from before.
Ultimately, the appointed day came. Although I was supposed to be accompanied by an experienced nurse, I was worried about flying. I thought I would have serious respiratory problem
s at such a height. But fortunately, everything went very well and I arrived at the hospital completely healthy.
The next day, the doctor took me to the operating room for a bronchoscopy. He examined my trachea carefully and found that it wasn’t [...] better [...]. After
the operation, he came to my room in the ward and spoke to me and my parents. We were not pleased with what we were hearing, but the doctor had a suggestion for us!
He offered me to put a new kind of tube into my trachea instead of a tracheostomy tube. He explained that the new tube, called
aT-tube, had three branches, one of
which was placed into the top section of trachea. In this way, air could flow through the larynx, and vocal cords would vibrate; consequently, it was possible to speak. Besides, with a T-tube I could breathe through my nose; with a tracheostomy tube I could just breathe directly through the tube
. Therefore
, the inhal
ed air was so dry.
What a suggestion he was offering to me! I would able to speak after five years.
I was worried about this new experience, though I couldn’t ignore the ability to speak. Therefore, I accepted to try the new tube.
The doctor informed me that I might not bear the T-tube, hence I should not be so hopeful. He advised me to consider the
upcoming operation
as just [...] trying my luck; otherwise, I might be disappointed.
Two days later, I was taken to the operating room again and after I came around, I found myself in my room with a new feeling. I was breathing through my nose. What a pleasant feeling! It seemed I could bear the tube easily.
The doctor kept me hospitalized for more three days to make sure I wouldn’t have any problem. However, I couldn’t speak yet. Just some ambiguous
noises were heard from the bottom of my larynx. Yet it was natural; I had not used my vocal cords for almost five years and in fact, they were asleep. It took time to wake them
up gradually.
Then, I was released from the hospital and got back home. As the doctor had predicted, I would able to speak after a couple of months. However, because of the problem with my spinal cord, my diaphragm and respiratory system were so weak; as a result, I couldn’t speak normally. In the same breath[.], I could express just three words and with a very low voice.
Even so, it was better than nothing.
After all, the ability to speak provided me with a wonderful chance!
A question:
Can I say, “I couldn’t withdraw from ability to speak.” Instead of “I couldn’t ignore the ability to speak.”
First of all, I should compliment you again on your excellent work!
The way you wrote it above (in the paragraph) isn't 100% perfectly fluent, but it is nevertheless quite acceptable. I would say something like, 'I couldn't pass up the chance to speak again' or 'I couldn't ignore the importance of being able to speak again.'
Also, in the first paragraph I changed a couple of verbs to make the past perfect. Here is a pretty good explanation of it: http://www.englishpage.com/verbpage/pastperfect.html
The last thing I would suggest is to brush up on the subjunctive mood. It's particularly tricky to use it correctly in the past tense: http://grammarist.com/grammar/subjunctive-mood/ (scroll down to where they discuss it in the past tense).
Ida, in addition to your writing skills, your story itself is very interesting to me. I always look forward to your next installment.