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The sentences below have been shorten. Could you give me your suggestion? Thank you!
1. The new wristwatch is in a green box in the top drawer of the bedside table.
New wristwatch in green box in top drawer of bedside table.
2. It is very hot here now.
It's hot.
3. We are having a wonderful party.
Party wonderful
4. Every single one of us here had reached the point of believing everything about him.
Everybody had come to believe everything about him.
5. Sharon is canceling her vacation because there is some urgent business problem for her to deal with.
Sharon canceling vacation for urgent business problem.
6. They helped us learn about a potential risk of abuse.
They educated us about abuse potential.
7. Mike is returning home, for he has just graduated from college.
Mike returning home--just graduated from college.
8. They emerged from the meeting walking side by side.
They walked together after meeting.
9. I wasn't able to do it as I had planned.
I couldn't make it.
10. What I am going to do is contact a media outlet that has a lot of money.
I'm going to contact a rich media outlet.

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[+3] - dalehileman - 09/03/2012 [quote]1. The new wristwatch is in a green box in the top drawer of the bedside table. New wristwatch in green box in top drawer of bedside table.[/quote]New wristwatch, green box, top drawer,...

@ziawj2,

#2, #6, #9 and #10 are all technically correct, but I think there's a bit of a shade of meaning difference with #6. #4 is pretty close.

With most of the others, the issues are either dropping the definite article (which you should generally not do, as it defines which item you're referring to) or a form of the verb "to be" and that kills the verb tenses you're using. For example, in #5 the verb is actually two words "is cancelling" - you can't just drop the "is" part as that is a part of the verb form itself.

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@ziawj2,

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The sentences below have been shortened. Could you give me your suggestion?

To what end, or in other words, for what purpose have these sentences been shortened, Ziawj?

Many sound like telegrams.

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@ziawj2,

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1. The new wristwatch is in a green box in the top drawer of the bedside table.
New wristwatch in green box in top drawer of bedside table.

New wristwatch, green box, top drawer, bedside

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2. It is very hot here now.
It's hot.

Hot

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Whew (with appropriate gesture)

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3. We are having a wonderful party.
Party wonderful

Wonderful (Looking upward, raise hand in direction of activity) or if you like shorter words

Wow

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4. Every single one of us here had reached the point of believing everything about him.
Everybody had come to believe everything about him.

And we believed (again, gesture in dir of perp)

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5. Sharon is canceling her vacation because there is some urgent business problem for her to deal with.
Sharon canceling vacation for urgent business problem.

Sharon canceling vacation, urgent business (Since all business is problematical)

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6. They helped us learn about a potential risk of abuse.
They educated us about abuse potential.

They warned us of abuse.

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7. Mike is returning home, for he has just graduated from college.
Mike returning home--just graduated from college.

Mike's returning from college grad

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8. They emerged from the meeting walking side by side.
They walked together after meeting.

They ambled from meeting

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9. I wasn't able to do it as I had planned.
I couldn't make it.

Just couldn't

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10. What I am going to do is contact a media outlet that has a lot of money.
I'm going to contact a rich media outlet.

I’ll tell Big Media

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@JTT,

Use the shorten sentences in quick messages.

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@dalehileman,

Thank you very much!

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@ziawj2,

Quite welcome 2

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@ziawj2,

I see, Ziawj.

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