Neverending Rap Battle

I'm waiting, it should be interesting
I'll come up with a verse of my own to holla to your holla, if you understand

Haha... 20 years of writing my ass. I'll battle you now.

U forgot Ill, Charlie, and shutdownpow is pretty good

No disrespect but you didn't really have rebuttals... It seemed like every verse was a brand new thing...

Also your metaphors need work your mostly similes you have excellent Multis and rhyme schemes though which I struggle wit do respect for that but no hate you aren't an all around mc the only person I think that can say that is prObably prof or maybe charlie no hate just some constructive criticism

Also holla at me wit another battle verse when u get a chance

@white monkey
i feel that,,and i can take critiques,,i really can,,,but when u battling,,and thats what we are doing here,,its about eating the comp,,insulting,,just trying to kill,,everyone has a different style,,and ur environment plays a part in the way u come back,its more of the whole verse and the effect it has,,u cant hear that thru a text,,i also had to write for like6 people,lol,,which is flattering,,no disrespect either,,but u guys write and battle more technically,battles aint about being cute,this might be an overseas site,,idk,,its not like that where im from, we wanna bite ya head off,lol,,,i try not to flip someones lines,,no hate,,but truthfully u should have left my bone thugs joint alone,,it was killer,should have been left alone,,thats the easy way out,the challenge for me,is writing right back,,and still make it hot,,i got original on the spot,,most in about 10 minutes or less,,and they still had sting,,you guys are nice,,but i didnt see any more intricate metaphors than i presented,,there were no lines that made me say,,oh ****,,how did he think of that?,,rhyme schemes were sort of simple,,i played with alot of lines and words,,made back references,,and one thing i did not see which is crucial,,was a lot of extensive vocabulary,,except from the professor,,,,im not trying to be technically sound,,,i dont want a deal or become famous,,, my dudes,who dont patronize me,trust me,or people who i dont know,,gives me the oohs and aahs on certain lines,,and thats good enuff for me,,i respect witty wordplay and nice lines and alot of people battling yall,,i didnt see that from any of them,,so im trying to figure out,,what do they really wanna see?,lol,,there is no possible way reading ur rhymes have the same punch,,just no way,,but i appreciate the feedback,,ur pretty good,,,but we just battling,,,not making a record,,,i am as much a student of writing rhymes and i look closely how people write,,,,its just more of a way to pass time for me,,,but i salute you for being a stand up dude,good mc,,,and being real,,i will be back shortly..peace

@bambino..u gonna need therapy after this one,lol
i done went thru 7 gays with spectacular venacular
i know u were gone 7 days i x'd you on my calender
been listening to flows for a minute baby
u wasnt even thought of yet ,moms still menustrating
i been writing for a week?,,that **** is weak
im battling some,,pimple face..with simple taste
with a pencil waist,ur minds garbage,,such a mental waste
keep fingering to hental tapes,,ima slow it down to a sensual pace
need a cartoon label,u hot thats a cartoon fable
i beat the pussy up,,awake in the am,smell your stinking ass
and was still nice enuff to leave ten on the table
yes you have structure,,flow quite technical
but where we from?,,thats bum ****,,destitute!!
i will box u like a vestibiule,,,dont care about the charges
it was man against animal,,,and i still came out sparkling
look,this brooklyn,,i know dudes that'll rob they mother
bend that bitch over,,**** her without a rubber
you know guards with with red coats and trumpets
i will eat your food tho i cant stand tea and crumpets
listen bum bitch i will storm ya dorm room
stop staring at my cock,,or we'll be doing porn soon
side note,,i should stop right now,,we in here crackin up but
i aint bucking ham,,im bucking beef
you in receipt of a skeet between ya ******* teeth
no cultural references,,no intricate wordplay
rhymes schemes simple,, just insignificant girl play
no back references,,im going to be your deadly pestilent
moving foward,,u probably have no idea what it means
so lets begin,,listen lyrics
im a deadly disease princess pillaging your pores
dont care what village,,im a leave,,and come back for more
im a carnavore trying to teach her to be a smarter whore
what you have in store,,clearance,,no quality
follow me,,in brooklyn never make an appearance,but if you do,
dont spit,,just swallow me!!,,,,easy!!!..shut----evaporating,,,gone

THIS WAS CHILD ABUSE,,,WASNT EVEN FAIR,,MY COWORKERS SAYS IT WAS TOO HARSH,FUNNY,BUT HARSH,,BUT THATS THE WAY IT IS,,IM NOT GOING BACK AND FORTH,,U CANT COME BACK FROM THAT,,IM TAKING A BREAK,,AND WHEN I COME BACK,,,WE CAN HAVE SOME FUN AGAIN,,PEACE EVERYBODY,,NEVER PERSONAL WHEN IM LYRICALLY HURTING YOU,,,HOLLA

That's the key to a good battle rapper taking your best line and ******* you up with it I've competed in many battles around my town given the competition wasn't that hard I still dominated I know I struggle with Multis but I can do them I just like to keep my metaphors down pact cuz there's no point in having a verse with clever rhymes if something clever isn't behind it I have barely been trying on these verses I'm currently working on an album (IF PROF EVER GETS ME THE BEATS lol ) that's where all my focus is
"I make real hip hop I don't have one so I can't rap about having a big deal
Only time I mntion a diamond in a verse is when I have this square on his heels"

"I'm twice the rapper you are I leave an mc scared
Write for days mc squared"

"Kids at their swinging and missin by inches when I rhyme
I just hit close to home in these kids minds"

Now ur gonna say I ain't clever given I've only been at this for barely a year and your at 20 lol you've been trying to get in the game longer than I've been alive so don't get cocky cuz u can stand ur ground against an mc who's been at this **** 19 years less than you if I really spent the effort and time I could rebuttal that entire round against Bambs and make it practically worthless don't get cocky my friend or bad things happen

But enough of this bitching and whining lets settle it lyrically

Kid wants to battle? I'll make his brain rattle
Of course he went thru 7 gays, it's pretty obvious you're a fag
I mean you called me baby, you probably are lookin' at pictures of Slim Shady and masturbating
Haha, pimple face? That's a mistake
I'm pretty sure 20 years of writing, somethin' would of flown better than that
Keep searching words on Google, so you can try and flow somethin'
You write like you just got done blowin' somethin'
Way to bring up my mother, walk into your mothers room now
Yeah we're fuckin' under the covers, WITH a rubber, what did I studder?
I'll fuckin' rebuddle all your rebuddles
So you're a Brooklyn guy? I'll grab you and rip off your suite tie
You've been thrown in the mist, been grabbed by the wrist
Hit with a load of bricks and punched with this fist
Still could mind your own business
Child abuse? You sound so fuckin' stupid, you fuckin' chump
Loadin' my glock up, not pullin' the trigger
You fuckin' pussy ass jumps, don't fuckin' think for a minute you livin' it up
Cause if your waste of bars was child abuse, then what the **** is this?
Wait don't answer that question I got the answer
Your the house cat this is the rare black panther
I don't need to describe the outcome, you already know
How the **** have you been writing for 20 years?
Your choice of words that you write you seem like your own eight years old
With my words, you better fall the **** back and faint
Must be huffin' paint judging by how your things are said
Fuckin' pussy, don't fuckin' try and push me
That's when push leads to shove, so shut your fuckin' mouth
Fore I knock your fuckin' faggot ass out






Co-Workers? HAHAHAHAHAHAAHA
You are soooo fake. Your lyrics are pre-mature
Co-Workers? Child abuse? Haha, loser.

I haven't called a therapist yet????
Uhh, do I get my money back?

lLOLOLOLOL yea yea , i'll throw you some beats today an a response Sleep was Needed AHAHA

hey shutdownpow , how old are you homie ???

Son quit talkin bout killin tracks you couldn't kill a track if you snapped a railroad in half 
But seriously son you want to know what I'm a do to you just look at your hat imma do that just snap ya back and even if you wearin a fitted I'll still **** on the lyrics u spittin 
And in all your songs ur talking about getting high?
You must be a bug then cuz this fruit flies
I'll just wipe u off my windshield to teach u a lesson 
You realize that I'm only a freshman yet I'm schoolin u in a session
So experienced you'd think I'm a veteran 
You think ur at my rank but your several steps below me 
If you think you truely better son show me
Cuz I'm the ******* captain bout to put u in an inferno
You'd think I was makin popcorn the way I put heat to a Kernel/colonel
Homie I'll stomp on you don't even bother respondin dude your face is ugly as **** cuz I'm dropping bombs on you
Your shoes look like **** son it's time for something new
I heard about this brand that puts a tree in the side of the shoe
Oh yeah they were timberland boots
I think they would suit you because when ever you timber on land you fall straight through to the roots!

Got a big battle coming up homie check the verse and make suggestions I have a couple others imma post Holla back! The kid is fat so that's what up with the Fat jokes aha

Oh what a surprise he said I'm gay 
What could I expect from a kid who rhymes like he's in second grade 
Pretty heavy set but he rhymes like a featherweight 
You a ******* disgrace 
You ain't a giant in the game just cuz you take up the most space 
Always sayin u gettin paid and gettin laid when u live in the most boring town ever made! Oh please 
Just cuz u got high cholesterol don't mean u getting cheese 
All I gotta do is say SUCK MY and he'll be down on his knees
Only reason you'd have a sick verse is if I had to vomit on it 
Good verse from you is like seeing Haley's comet 
That's like once every 70 something years
So well never hear a good verse from u since your dieing right here 
See its the throne I claim your just a pawn 
Brains over brawn 
Which is ironic cuz on the mic u ain't even that strong 
It's a classic example of the pen being mightier than the sword 
So u get hurt with a word cut by a verb and killed with this verse 

HELLFIRE

[Intro]
"Depart from me, ye cursed, into everlasting fire
Prepared for the Devil and his angels!"

[Verse 1]
Locked behind the Hell's Gate, there's nowhere to run
You lived a sin in Earth, your time there is done
Now behold as you're drawn in among a world of pain
Where all the men are tortured and all the girls are slain
Scorched with burning canes and bars submerged in flames
The demons converse in circles throughout their working days
Satanic cults will surround you like vultures
And fiery hot demons will have you browned in the toasters
Fireballs bake you like batches in the bakery
Coals sprinkled on you just to add a little flavoring
You're in Hell's Kitchen, but Ramsay ain't dictating it
The Devil is the head cook with patterns on his apron
His minions are the commix in the kitchen assisting
Seasoning your eyeballs and mixing the intestines
Cook it in the cauldron like a wizard and a witch scene
Now you're ratatouille, that's a little French cuisine

[Hook]
Die in (HELLFIRE)
Burn in (HELLFIRE)
Burning emcees is my desire
Go in (HELLFIRE)
Get thrown in (HELLFIRE)
Watch you fry in deep hellfire
(x2)

[Verse 2]
My heart burns with anger, my soul burns with madness
Every time that I approach these bold, bulky gangsters
These cold, quirky pranksters with minds like bananas
Bullies, psychopaths and giant bystanders
I think they're all behaving too hype by my standards
They deserve to be killed off by a psychopathic
Psychotic, animalistic, wild hydro addict
A violent kind of bastard who makes slicing guys a habit
Dice them into strips like a slice of white cabbage
Brutally disembowel their insides with knives and Gatlings
Tan their hides and strangle them with bow-ties and grapplings
hooks, and suspend them like a giant vine of raspberries
Or simply pluck their eyes out with the prongs of a fork
Like the one the Devil uses when he tortures a corpse
Develop a sick mind and just slaughter them all
Kick those big men to the ground and stomp their jaws on the floor

[Hook]

[Verse 3]
Hellfire is where the sinners all belong
And I know the rogues and villains won't be living on for long
They kill, harm and rob
Burgle, steal and break into someone's lawn
And take off with all the valuables from their rings to all their gold
God's already got their names in His golden book
So when the judgement comes His sentences will get them all shook
And when I die, I'll be standing on the bright side laughing
Point a finger and scream out, "Bye bye, FAGGOTS!"
Watch their terrified spirits fall down the black spiral
Get devoured by a group of hungry hounds with mad smiles
And Lucifer will be down there to welcome them aboard
Because you and I know there's no hope for them at all
This isn't black magic, witchcraft or wizardry
It's a worst nightmare bound to last for centuries
Eternally stranded in the Isle of No Return
Separation from God, while the vile souls burn!

[Hook]

shut up, shut down, shut it clown
I gotta slut with her butt up, butt down
in and out, side to side, and round to round
Ground and Pound, try and box me, block out
I'm rocky, knock out, I'm cocky even without my cock out
Take punches all day, yea your big..in a small way
Bob and weave, robbed ya teeth, that's the only reason ya spit biietch
What's ya prob cheech, cat gotcha tongue, you rappin so dumb
when you flappin yo gum, like a snatch on the run
This pussy tryna make a get-a-away
Shut out? Didn't your mum tell ya to get away
The only thing you shut down is your GateWay
everyday is hate day, a freezing lake? that's gay.
Go bake a cheese cake, mmmk! I squeeze fakes
Go wherever the beat takes, Tuesday or Thursday
any day the hurt stay, squirt spray, dirt lay
I ain't even playing, this is murk play

I wouldn't give two shits with a split crack
**** you bitch you can't spit back
Let's ride on a mic to a real beat
Show you how I handle my business on a real beat
See I freestyle, I don't **** around with writtens
I'm better off the dome, cuz I'm flipping ninja's
You in the school section tryna find some Pencil's.
I'm vibing to beats spitting riddles.
**** what I said on my last post
that **** was gross, yesterdays garbage
I got more tabs than a Bar Wage
I just keep hitting spaces
You couldn't keep my pace in 8 races
I ate my braces, now I spit shrapnel
Peel back your cracked skull
scalped POW with a bottle still full

aight listen azzkeeka cuz now im back
you trynna come at me but ya rymes is wack
seems like you get ya lyrics from doctor seuss
i'll have ya ass givein up trynna call a truce
im not on thiss **** for no fun nd games
all ya bitchez on here is some fuckin lames
nd neva eva have i eva been a hoe
you just mad cuz im in control
you a wanna be nigga wit a rubber dick
well shove in in your mouth bitch shoke on it.....


come at me harder plz

It would help if you came hard too...

^ yeah buddy.