Neverending Rap Battle

I looked into your future and its dark as Guiness Stout/
It's already the end of the battle, so I'm taking Shot out/
I run my clock on liquor, against you it's just wasted time/
Cocaine smugglin you wont' see his dope lines he's too busy ridin' mine/
If you paid a ghost writer, your money was mis-spent/
I'd check the toilet then sue your own ass for copyright infringement/
It's a force of fiction thinking you can compete with me/
Label me the Lord of Diction and crown me a text Diety/
You dehyradrated when I spank you, you spittin' nuthin' butt whack/
Somebody tell this squirrel Shot to get his lips off my nutsack/
I'm new at this board, but I leave you shakin' nervous and hi-strung/
Bring your best, and you'll be living proof that versus me MC's die young/
Against me, it's my delivery that's causin' you to shiver see/
I'm the complete circle, eclipsing you to just a sliver to me/
Compared to me, you dare to be? You just anotha suckah G/
I'm like a condom full of liquid heat, so don't you dare **** wit me/
I can change the temperature; against you my rhymes are just stuck hot/
I just blasted you full of little holes, so I guess I'mma buck Shot/

Ayo thought I'd post some ****,

It's like I'm Moses on the mic they way I "split" these **** Emcee's// (seas)
My lyrics will leave you "Green" with envy like a patient with "Lyme" Diesease//

^^^I didn't feel the moses line that much but i liked the lime disease part

This bitch thinks he's a "Heavy Weight Rapper?" ****, only if Ali Calls//
The only way you'd "contend" in this bout is with 40 pound Bolwing Balls//

^^^Good metaphore(Ali/Heavweight)

You remind me of a "Acrobat" the way your style "Flips" from Lame to Sad//
Jesus I could be a "Vacuum Cleaner" and I still wouldn't "Suck" that Bad//

^^^You need more after "flip" than lame to sad, Vaccuum line was aight

It's like i'm the "Apple" pimp, cause your it's your girl that "I-Mac"//
She reminds me of a squirrel the way she keeps hunting My "Nut" Sac//

^^^Good wordplay with the I mack and nut sack

You have great ideas bro, wordplay metaphors and creativity. I feel that you need to work on your depth (meanings) and flow more though, like try to get your rhyming words to rhyme more within it's syllobols.. Like lame to sad and suck that bad do rhyme but only the last word.. you feelin me?...... What you wrote there is in the top 25% of this site though, it walks all over some of the stuff that gets posted here bro.. keep it up

Aight jus' a lil somthin. Peace!

yo doc sorry bro a votes a vote all votes count

Time Bandit, Dat was sh*t I had just read and sat-through
It's obvious you haven't elevated since the last time I spat at-you
Ya verses suck, Only time that's clicking is when u sent it
I ain't even trying and you can see ya introduction has ended
You would think with that many posts, he'd be better right?
F*ck man, capitalizing and putting ppl's names in doesn't make you tight!
Structure of ya bars more like u just stacked-shame
Mailing me a videogame is the only time you send Max Payne (pain)
I got fillers that smack this b*tch and crack-nerds
I burst bars that 'Peirce ya chest' like 'Paul's jersey on backwards'
Ya sh*t rhymes clench my fists, One of ya bars cause me strife
Do me a favor - slit ya wrists, And dammit - I'll supply the knife!

Time Bandit, Dat was sh*t I had just read and sat-through
It's obvious you haven't elevated since the last time I spat at-you
Ya verses suck, Only time that's clicking is when u sent it
I ain't even trying and you can see ya introduction has ended
You would think with that many posts, he'd be better right?
F*ck man, capitalizing and putting ppl's names in doesn't make you tight!
Structure of ya bars more like u just stacked-shame
Mailing me a videogame is the only time you send Max Payne (pain)
I got fillers that smack this b*tch and crack-nerds
I burst bars that 'Peirce ya chest' like 'Paul's jersey on backwards'
Ya sh*t rhymes clench my fists, One of ya bars cause me strife
Do me a favor - slit ya wrists, And dammit - I'll supply the knife!