Fri 12 Feb, 2016 10:48 am
I am writing an explanatory essay regarding a Grimm fairy tale. I started my second body paragraph with the following sentence: "In accordance with violence, poverty also plays a role . . ."
I was wondering if the phrase "in accordance with" even makes sense in the sentence. I would really like to use that phrase, or one very similar to it.
Any and all advice would be appreciated.
It does not make sense as it stands. You might consider rephrasing....e.g....
"In accordance with the usual experiences of the downtrodden, poverty and violence go hand-in-hand.