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Did teacher do something wrong?

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Reply Mon 13 May, 2013 12:00 pm
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Family or friends which is more important?

I got 5 from 10 for this essay ( Teacher says that she doesn't know such expressions as : turn out, there for you, etc.)
I understand that i need opinion in introduction? And I know i don't need to write you're, it's in essay.
I wrote my essay with this essay example : www.activemultimedia.co.uk/wp-content/uploads/2013/03/essay_structure.gif
Where did i do mistakes? Did teacher do something wrong? I need to find this out !!

Sorry for my poor English, i want to know my mistakes.
P.S. Size of essay is good.
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Reply Mon 13 May, 2013 01:58 pm
Nothing "wrong" with your essay - it's just very informal writing.

If it is an "essay" then use more formal English.

Use facts instead of emotions to support your opinion.

May I ask how old you are?
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Reply Mon 13 May, 2013 02:15 pm
@PUNKEY,
I am 18 years old. My official language is Lithuanian language.

Do you think my teacher corrected my essay correctly, and rated it correctly?
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