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I feel "after using" very awkward, Please improve the sentence

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oristarA
 
Reply Thu 5 Apr, 2012 02:30 am


After using the mixture of the drug and the virus on the cells, the daily observation of the cell lesion found that ...
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McTag
 
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Reply Thu 5 Apr, 2012 02:38 am
@oristarA,

It's not awkward, it's quite normal, and perfectly okay.
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contrex
 
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Reply Thu 5 Apr, 2012 03:53 am
Oristar is right. The oiginal seems to mean that the daily observation used the mixture, whixh is nonsense. Also "the virus" can be shortened. Better:

After the mixture of the drug and virus was used on the cells, the daily observation found...
OmSigDAVID
 
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Reply Thu 5 Apr, 2012 05:23 am
@oristarA,
Its fine as it is; its perfectly OK.





David
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farmerman
 
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Reply Thu 5 Apr, 2012 05:44 am
@oristarA,
Its just not precise (its really not awkward)

Quote:


After using the mixture of the drug and the virus on the cells, the daily observation of the cell lesion found that ...


try

Upon using the drug/virus mixture on the target cells, daily observation of lesions in the traget cells revealed that...
That way the "daily observation" becomes the object of the phrases.

Yours is ok though.
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oristarA
 
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Reply Thu 5 Apr, 2012 06:32 am
Cool.
Thank you all.
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McTag
 
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Reply Thu 5 Apr, 2012 01:42 pm
@oristarA,

OSDavid is right, I am right, everybody else is wrong.
contrex
 
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Reply Thu 5 Apr, 2012 04:43 pm
@McTag,
McTag wrote:


OSDavid is right, I am right, everybody else is wrong.


Bollocks.
McTag
 
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Reply Fri 6 Apr, 2012 01:03 am
@contrex,

I don't willingly side with OSD, at any time. You may be assured I don't do this lightly.

So, not bollocks.
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JTT
 
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Reply Fri 6 Apr, 2012 12:51 pm
@contrex,
Quote:
The oiginal seems to mean that the daily observation used the mixture, whixh is nonsense.


What's nonsense is that a sentient being could imagine such a scenario.
contrex
 
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Reply Fri 6 Apr, 2012 02:14 pm
@JTT,
JTT wrote:

Quote:
The oiginal seems to mean that the daily observation used the mixture, whixh is nonsense.


What's nonsense is that a sentient being could imagine such a scenario.


Why is it different from this in structure and ambiguity?

After purchasing the new collar, the cat looked very neat.
JTT
 
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Reply Fri 6 Apr, 2012 04:20 pm
@contrex,
For the exceedingly simple reason, C, that cats don't have credit cards and that they almost never make purchases.
contrex
 
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Reply Fri 6 Apr, 2012 05:03 pm
@JTT,
JTT wrote:

For the exceedingly simple reason, C, that cats don't have credit cards and that they almost never make purchases.


You haven't met my Stripey. (Do you have Aspergers?)

JTT
 
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Reply Fri 6 Apr, 2012 05:29 pm
@contrex,
You've tried that before, a number of times, C.

You certainly seem to have some serious avoidance issues.
Philippos
 
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Reply Fri 6 Apr, 2012 05:30 pm
@JTT,
How does that display avoidance? I don't get it.
JTT
 
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Reply Fri 6 Apr, 2012 05:36 pm
@Philippos,
If you knew Contrex like we know Contrex, oh oh oh what a guy!

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How does that display avoidance? I don't get it.


All joking aside, Philippos, Contrex simply hasn't addressed the actual language issue.

If you feel he has, then please, by all means, go ahead and explain it.
Philippos
 
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Reply Fri 6 Apr, 2012 05:38 pm
@JTT,
I don't know Contrex or the language issue you are referring to. Would you be able to enlighten me so I can judge for myself?
Philippos
 
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Reply Fri 6 Apr, 2012 05:39 pm
@Philippos,
Perhaps "judge" wasn't the best choice of words. I meant "decide." Kinda sorta the same thing.
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JTT
 
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Reply Fri 6 Apr, 2012 05:59 pm
@Philippos,
Quote:
or the language issue ...


If you don't know what language issue has been addressed here, P, then it's not of much import, as I see it, in bringing you up to speed.
Philippos
 
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Reply Fri 6 Apr, 2012 06:03 pm
@JTT,
I don't know...maybe I want to understand so we can all be on the same page.
 

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