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Please revise the sentence below.

 
 
Tangy82
 
Reply Fri 9 Mar, 2012 12:47 pm
Please revise the sentence below. I am struggling with conveying my message clearly. Thank you so much for your help!

Earlier this week, I established a new Verizon Conferencing account. I could not remove Sarah’s name from our previous account, because the account belongs to Sarah and not Kraft Foods. For this reason, Sarah is the only person who can cancel or make changes to that account.
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Reply Fri 9 Mar, 2012 12:53 pm
My only suggestion;

belongs to Sarah, not Kraft Foods.
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