which writing do you prefer?

Reply Wed 29 Jul, 2009 03:19 am
Hi guys, please look at the following two writings composed by me and my boyfriend, then tell me which one do you prefer? If you can tell me some mistakes and make some comments, I will appreciate your enthusiasm very much.
The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting and the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The charts are at http://blog.sina.com.cn/s/blog_4cff1cab0100etxl.html

Writing 1
The two bar charts show trends of marriages and divorces in America from 1970 to 2000, as well as the marital condition of adult Americans in the year 1970 and 2000.

We can see from the first chart that there was a downward trend in the rate of married couples in the USA between 1970 and 2000, while the number of divorced couples fluctuates during the same period. Specifically, the marriage rate leveled off at 2.5 millions in the first two decades, and then dropped gradually, bottoming at 2 millions in 2000. In term of divorces category, only 1 million couples divorced in 1970, but the figure climbed moderately in 1980 and declined a little in the later decade, finally stood at the same number of 1970.

It is clear in the second graph that, although there was slight decrease after 30 years, marriage is still the first choice of most Americans, about two-thirds of adults getting married, which shows a similar trend in the first graph. However, widowed and divorced people represented an insignificant share, with under 10% for each, but it should be noted that more than doubled Americans divorced in 2000 than in 1970. In addition, the figure for never married category experience a slight rise from 15% to 20%.

Overall, the charts demonstrate that more and more Americans are in unmarried status in 2000 than in 1970.

Writing 2
The two charts illustrate the changes of the rates of USA marriage and divorce between 1970 and 2000, and the proportion of four groups of adult Americans’ marital status in two of the years.

According to the first chart, the number of marriages was always above the number for divorces by a large margin. In the period of 20 years, the former decreased slightly from 2.5 million to 2 million, whilst the latter fluctuated between 1 million to about 1.4 million.

Turning to the second chart, the married adults occupied major share, the three other groups were marked lower. We can see that married and widowed categories trended downwards, from 70% and 8% to 59% and 5% respectively. In contrast, the never married and divorced groups grew from 13% and 2% to 19% and 9%.

It is clear from the charts that more and more American adults were in the unmarried stage.
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Reply Wed 29 Jul, 2009 03:20 am
The charts are in the website:http://blog.sina.com.cn/s/blog_4cff1cab0100etxl.html
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