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Reply Sat 11 Jul, 2009 09:10 am
You must think we should think of how to we live our lives before we think of how to die. But, I think in order for us to live meaningfully, we should think of how we should die.

The word 'think' is used many times. Could some member please rephrase the sentence for me so that others words are used in place of 'think'?

Many thanks.
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contrex
 
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Reply Sat 11 Jul, 2009 09:22 am
@tanguatlay,
It is not one sentence, but two. Does the "You must think" at the start of the first sentence mean that the speaker assumes that the person being addressed thinks "we should think of how to we live our lives before we think of how to die"?

tanguatlay
 
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Reply Sat 11 Jul, 2009 01:31 pm
@contrex,
No. The speaker is saying that we should think how we would die rather than think how we should live.
contrex
 
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Reply Sat 11 Jul, 2009 01:43 pm
@tanguatlay,
Then you don't need any more than this:

In order for us to live meaningfully, we should to think of how we will die.

The rest is excess verbiage.

roger
 
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Reply Sat 11 Jul, 2009 01:47 pm
@tanguatlay,
tanguatlay wrote:

You must think we should think of how to we live our lives before we think of how to die. But, I think in order for us to live meaningfully, we should think of how we should die.
Many thanks.


I would delete the word "we" in the first sentence. Otherwise, I think the repetition adds to the effect. That's only my opinion, but sometimes repetition like that works.

Second sentence, just delete "I think". Again, just my opinion.
contrex
 
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Reply Sat 11 Jul, 2009 01:50 pm
@roger,
Quote:
You must think we should think


This is very bad

Quote:
how to we live our lives


As roger notes, the 'we' here is a mistake.

As I wrote above, the speaker is saying that in order to live our lives well, we need to think about how we should die. That is the essence of his or her message. Why say more?
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roger
 
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Reply Sat 11 Jul, 2009 01:53 pm
@contrex,
You see a seafood store on the end of a pier, and it has a sign.

Fresh Fish For Sale Here.

Of course it's fresh. It's on the ocean, right? So just use Fish for Sale Here.

Now, wait. For Sale? Of course they're for sale. Nobody's giving away anything. Lets just say Fish Here.

Well, the sign is Here, the store is Here, the Fish are here, so where else would the fish be sold?

Here's the final sign.

FISH
contrex
 
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Reply Sat 11 Jul, 2009 02:03 pm
@roger,
Removed a few more words.

To live well, we should consider how to die.
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JTT
 
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Reply Sat 11 Jul, 2009 05:48 pm
@contrex,
There's more than one way to dress up a cat, Contrex.
tanguatlay
 
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Reply Sun 12 Jul, 2009 02:34 am
@JTT,
JTT wrote:

There's more than one way to dress up a cat, Contrex.

Hi JTT

What does the sentence above mean?

Many thanks.
contrex
 
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Reply Sun 12 Jul, 2009 02:56 am
@tanguatlay,
I believe that JTT is being facetious; perhaps he or she would care to elaborate? At any rate, I presume the burden of his or her message is that there are usually multiple equally valid ways to express a concept.
JTT
 
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Reply Sun 12 Jul, 2009 09:55 am
@contrex,
That's correct, Contrex, there are, as you've so ably put it, "multiple equally valid ways to express a concept".
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