I have just wrote a questionnaire for my term paper and want to mail it to English Native speakers. Could you please tell me which sentences are not standard English and how to improve them? Your help is really appreciated. Thank you in advance.
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This questionnaire is designed purely for a learning
(the word you want is education) project. And there are no "right" or "wrong" answers. Your opinion is what is
(you don't need the words "what is") wanted. Please give an answer for all THE QUESTIONS (DELETE ANSWERS). If you change your mind about an answer, just cross it out and circle another. We'd
(you don't need the 'd part, which implies the word "would". You already appreciate them. ) really appreciate your kindness and help.
Demographic information:
Gender (circle): Male Female
Age group:10-19 20-29 30-39 40-49 50-59 60 and above
Is English your First Language(NO CAPITAL LETTERS FOR FIRST LANGUAGE): Yes No
Next, you will read two situation descriptions, each followed by a conversation between two speakers. After reading through the dialogues
(I think the term is awkward, you already called it a situation. I realize you are talking about the coversation. Maybe just call it the conversation?), please complete a short questionnaire based on your native speaker's intuition.
Situation 1: You are reading a newspaper, while waiting for the school bus at the station in(CHANGE IN TO AT) one university. At this time, a man with a pile of paper and a pen in hand walks up to you and says the following words. (Note: you know the bus won't come in (CHANGE IN TO FOR) another 8 minutes.)
Man: (speaks awkwardly with a STRONG Asian accent) Hello. (you look up.) This questio
questionnaire is TO know YOUR idea on a CONCERT. It WILL cost
eh
5 minute of YOU. DO this questionnaire
eh
FOR me, ok? (hands you the pen and a piece of paper)
START WITH Please tell us your feelings by answering the following questions?CHANGE QUESTION MARK TO COLON
1) Are you WILLING to help him, ON HEARING that? 1 Not willing to. 2 I'm willing to.
(you can eliminate the word "to" from both answers)
2) Do you feel comfortable at these words?
(eliminate the words "at these words" and change to "with this exchange". That covers not just the words but also the situation between the two persons) 1 No 2 Just ok 3 Yes
3) If there is anything that makes you feel that you are not willing to help, how much effect, do you think,DELETE COMMA could that factor (listed below) exert on your negative feeling?
(eliminate the term "do you think" as that is understood, change the word "exert" to "impact")I DISAGREE. CHANGE EXERT TO AFFECT.
1No effect 2a DELETE A, MAKE CAPITAL L IN LITTLElittle effect 3Some effect 4Much effect 5Strong effect
A. His appearance 1 2 3 4 5
B. His nationality 1 2 3 4 5
C. Bus is coming soon 1 2 3 4 5
D. His Strong LOWERCASE S IN STRONGaccent 1 2 3 4 5
E. His bad grammar 1 2 3 4 5
F. "I" am not easygoing DELETE QUOTATION MARKS FROM I 1 2 3 4 5
G. His sex (male) 1 2 3 4 5
H. "My" present moodDELETE QUOTES FROM MY 1 2 3 4 5
I. Didn't say "please" 1 2 3 4 5
J. His remarks are impolite 1 2 3 4 5
K. English not fluent 1 2 3 4 5
L. No interest in the concert 1 2 3 4 5
M. Disturb my reading 1 2 3 4 5
(disturbed)
N. Sounds like a command 1 2 3 4 5
O. Sounds his English is bad 1 2 3 4 5
(sounds like his English is poor)
Situation 2: SupposingCHANGE SUPPOSING TO SUPPOSE that you work in the personnel department and are busy with quarterly staff appraisal things,PERIOD. NO COMMA. START NEW SENTENCE a man knocks at your door and comes in.
Man: (speaks awkwardly with a STRONG Asian accent) I am Leo Chou from
eh
finance department. Now, I need the exact work title of an apprentice, named William Burns. He work for us last summer. And I also need to know which department he worked. (Note: you keep a record of all these CHANGE THESE TO THISinformation.)
Could you please tell us your feelings after listening to the previous words CHANGE WORDS TO CONVERATIONby answering the following questions?
4) Are you WILLING to help him, ON HEARING that? 1 Not willing to. 2 I'm willing to.
(again, eliminate the word "to" from both answers)
5) Do you feel comfortable at these words?
(again, eliminate the words "at these words" and change to "with this exchange". That covers not just the words but also the situation between the two persons) 1 No 2 Just ok 3 Yes
6) If there is anything that makes you feel that you are not willing to help, how much effect, DELETE COMMA AFTER EFFECTdo you think, could that factor (listed below) exert on your negative feeling?
(see above when I answered this for the first scenario you presented)
7) If in the first situation, the man says in standard and fluent English, what's your rating then?
(eliminate the word "to" from the answers)
Will you help? 1 Not willing to. 2 I'm still willing to.
8) If in the second situation, the man says in standard and fluent English, what's your rating then?
(eliminate the word "to" from the answers)
Will you help? 1 Not willing to. 2 I'm still willing to.
9) When you hear an impolite request, do you think you will feel better (or forgive him/her) if it is a foreigner who DELETE SAYS SO. CHANGE TO IS SPEAKING says so rather than a native speaker?
I feel (1 even worse 2 the same 3 better)
(you're using parentheses here and not elsewhere in the questionnaire; you probably want to be consistent with this)
Thank you so much for your time and help!!
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OVER
Thank you again :)