Neverending Rap Battle III

Fo-Realz:
Okay, Hitman, Challenging me, U just 'lost'.. Oh wait are U a tourist?
I bet he 'looks up' all his rhymes.. That's iigh.. I'll still make U 'the-sorrest'. (Thesaurus)
I don't even remember battling U.. kill? Don't even doubt, cuhz' U'll run man,
It's kinda' funny.. His list of friends can be counted on one hand!
So, I'ma call up his friends after this, and they'll be mad that I ripped ya',
But face it, the only thing deadly about this Hitman J.. is his advatar picture!
He's a foo' U see, and it ain't new to me, when U see this f*ck's repping,
It's like the gay community.. oh wait, like this battle cuhz' I jus' 'wrecked-em'! (Rectum)
Counting the d-riders on here.. Don't deny, look at Eryk, no wonder he's out,
And your skill level ain't even 'remote' and if it was.. it's hidden under the couch.
My 'bars' are 'explosive'... So let's just say, U'll neva' be the 'bomb's escapee',
J..I tried to type at your skill level.. [size=7]but this was the smallest font-they-gave-me![/size]

Self Explanatory.. Dun' get sumfn'.. Ask.
iigh. Gud luck.

Hitman J:
This dude gettin a 'nervous breakdown' he has his own 'recital for raps'
at least we know he 'love mother nature' Cuz this PuNk 'recycles hiz crap!'

Stop givin out 'net rates' and those borin raps, cuz we all know them well
better off puttin up signs on peoples yards screamin HOMES FOR SALE!!

im 'battlin toddlers' look at this defiant punk dont you understand?your out!!
you went over the bar limit Dipshit, Cmon mahn 'Cant you count?

I aint no 'power plant' but mess around ill leave you 'shocked' like U 'suckin on cables
and when that **** dont work you rely on{Whores} like you
'Fu'ckin in stables!

Okay, Hitman, Challenging me, U just 'lost'.. Oh wait are U a tourist?
I bet he 'looks up' all his rhymes.. That's iigh.. I'll still make U 'the-sorrest'. (Thesaurus)

Set up was worded wierd.. Okay I guess.. Punch lacked, I get the wordplay, but no real punch..

I don't even remember battling U.. kill? Don't even doubt, cuhz' U'll run man,
It's kinda' funny.. His list of friends can be counted on one hand!

Set up was horrible man.. and the punch was funny..

So, I'ma call up his friends after this, and they'll be mad that I ripped ya',
But face it, the only thing deadly about this Hitman J.. is his advatar picture!

Set up was meh, The punch was played and weak, I hate avy/sig play, unless you flip the **** outta them, cuz their uncreative..

He's a foo' U see, and it ain't new to me, when U see this f*ck's repping,
It's like the gay community.. oh wait, like this battle cuhz' I jus' 'wrecked-em'! (Rectum)

set up was okay, Punch was worded wierdly that didn't make the punch hit.. you said like twice in the same sentence.. throws the punch off and not to mention the flow of you're verse..

Counting the d-riders on here.. Don't deny, look at Eryk, no wonder he's out,
And your skill level ain't even 'remote' and if it was.. it's hidden under the couch.

set up was okay, punch was pretty cool. I haven't seen that idea anywhere.. honestly.. you should of said "but if it was" instead of "and if it was" just would of sounded better.. but meh, good punch.

My 'bars' are 'explosive'... So let's just say, U'll neva' be the 'bomb's escapee',
J..I tried to type at your skill level.. but this was the smallest font-they-gave-me!

lol @ the set up suckin' ass. lol @ the punch, funny as ****.. worded wierd. would of hit alot harder if it was worded better. but none the less funny..


Overall:[/u] You really need to work on your set ups man, There's no real connection between you're set up and punch... if you try to make a punch after a punch your verse if forced as ****.. I remember tellin' you this.. and you gotta word you're punches better, you have the wordplay and the concepts just gotta flip them hard and differently to make tem hit to their full potential... overall decent verse, you can do better.. a couple of punches were hittin'...

This dude gettin a 'nervous breakdown' he has his own 'recital for raps'
at least we know he 'love mother nature' Cuz this PuNk 'recycles hiz crap!'

I thought this was a cool opener man, Set up was okay.. punch was okay at best.. lol..

Stop givin out 'net rates' and those borin raps, cuz we all know them well
better off puttin up signs on peoples yards screamin HOMES FOR SALE!!

lmfao. wtf.. No punch here.. How does this diss him?? I honestly wasn't feelin' this bar at all..

im 'battlin toddlers' look at this defiant punk dont you understand?your out!!
you went over the bar limit Dipshit, Cmon mahn 'Cant you count?

set up could of been worded better. and punch was weak..wasn't hard at all..

I aint no 'power plant' but mess around ill leave you 'shocked' like U 'suckin on cables
and when that **** dont work you rely on{Whores} like you
'Fu'ckin in stables!

set up was forced.. punch could of have been worded better. I seen what you meant, but no real punch. the wordplay was kinda poinltess... you gotta end strong.. and this wasn't strong..

Overall: You're verse wasn't the best.. You're set's need work, YOu gotta have a concnetion between the punch and the setup... read what I said to foreals about setups.. you need to work on that too... and you're punches were simple.. not hittin'.. you came with stuff that a newbie would come with, that a newbie would think is "fresh" and honestly none of what you said was fresh, you're punchs were on the weak end for real man.. gotta pick that up.. you started out good, but you quickly lost your momenteum....

uhh...who did you vote for? if you just commin to try and make us look bad then get that **** outta here...

oh i see....

and you bein a bit hipicritial cuz none of your punches tha best either bitch

Hitman J wrote:

oh i see....

and you bein a bit hipicritial cuz none of your punches tha best either bitch

I know.. they were still way better than you'res... even you can admit that.. But you dont' want too.... so **** it.. cuz it's sad that all the people that voted for you, are in your sig as "homies" or in the same wack crew "L.A" lmfao.