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Hi everybody again, I'll be back here in no time. Just troubles. Could you

people have a look at this paragraph and tell me my mistakes?

Actually, they are not mine Smile

ENTREPRENEURIAL TRAINING PROGRAMS IN THE USA

There are several training programs that focus on developing future

entrepreneurs. This essay will shed light on entrepreneurial training

programs in the USA.

There are different programs that train inner city high school students in

the USA. First of all, these programs aim to teach students how to become

good entrepreneurs. Also, from these programs such as YETP program,

students learn how to help the community and care for others. In addition,

they learn how to make good relationships with people by visiting the

markets and meeting businesspeople. Furthermore, they become more

independent and they learn how to earn their living.

In short, entrepreneurial training programs help to make the citizens

more self-respect and responsible toward the community and themselves.

Time will show the importance of these training programs in developing

future entrepreneurs.

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not bad at all, i don't think George Bush could write it much better. but there are a few small mistakes in the last two paragraphs, which i'll correct:

Also, from programs such as the YETP program, students learn how to help the community and care for others. In addition, they learn how to make good relationships with people by visiting markets and meeting businesspeople. Finally, they become more independent and learn how to earn a living.

In short, entrepreneurial training programs help citizens gain more self-respect and become more responsible toward the community and themselves.

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Thanks yitwail for your reply. Shouldn't we say the inner city schools

students instead of inner city school student in the USA?

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you could say inner city (high) schools' students, and it would be correct grammatically, but as i read it, "high school student" is the noun, so you don't need the s' after school to make it a possessive. this is a common construction, used in sentences like "I'm a college student" or "he's a high school student."

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