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I got up a little later than usual on Sunday morning. I washed and had a quick breakfast. Then I started going to town to buy the dictionary recommended by the teacher. At the school gate I saw Tom. I asked him if he was going to town too, and he said that he was. So we decided to go together. All the buses were crowded. We had to wait for a long time at the bus stop before we could get on a bus. An hour later we got off the bus at a busy street. There were three bookstores there. We went to the first one and didn't find the dictionary. Then we went to the second one and the shop assistant said that the dictionary was sold out. I finally bought the dictionary at the third bookstore. After that Tom and I went to other stores and bought various things. We returned to school just in time for lunch.

I got up a little later than usual on Sunday morning, washed and had a quick breakfast. Then, I left the house and headed toward town to buy the dictionary recommended by my (what course?) teacher. At the school gate I saw Tom. He was headed to town, as well, so he joined me. All the buses were crowded, forcing us to wait for a long time at the stop. An hour later, we got off the bus at a busy street, where we discovered three bookstores. We went to the first one and didn't find the dictionary. The shop assistant in the second bookstore said that the dictionary was sold out. I finally bought the dictionary at the third bookstore. After that Tom and I went to other stores and bought various things. We returned to school just in time for lunch.

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I got up a little later than usual on Sunday morning, washed and had a quick breakfast.

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Why did you get up later than usual? What did you have for breakfast? Did you like it?

Then, I left the house and headed toward town to buy the dictionary recommended by my (what course?) teacher.

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Would a description of the teacher be interesting? The class? How you're doing in that class? Maybe, maybe not. The tone you want to set with the piece would lead you to the areas you should embellish. Maybe he wants to talk more descriptively about the people on the buses, or what was on his mind during the bus ride...

At the school gate I saw Tom.

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Who is Tom? What do you think of him? Would we enjoy a tale of your last bit of mischief with ole Tom?

He was headed to town, as well, so he joined me. All the buses were crowded, forcing us to wait for a long time at the stop. An hour later, we got off the bus at a busy street, where we discovered three bookstores. We went to the first one and didn't find the dictionary. The shop assistant in the second bookstore said that the dictionary was sold out. I finally bought the dictionary at the third bookstore. After that Tom and I went to other stores and bought various things.

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Various things.... VARIOUS THINGS!!?? Don't let your nephew get away with 'various things.'

We returned to school just in time for lunch.