@engineer,
I strongly agree with Linkat. Ive found a point of view of the story helps in the creativity and keeping the work readable. Think about presenting the story from a point of view of, perhaps, an object in the story. Ive read a neat essay about the White House presented from the point of view of one of the rooms within it. Anything in biology , of course , can be presented from the POV of the organisms involved BUT, everyone would expect that, so e change the story to be told from the point of view of a small segment of geography where these organisms lived.
WHATS your subject,? Is it an issue, an event, or an object. Then think about a POV and you may find it helps streamline your writing.
The Phila Inquirer recently presented a series of essays on the changes in labor/management relations in our history by using a famous incident where many Irish immigrant laborers were brutally treated and were worked to death and were buried in an area called "Duffy's Cut". The Duffys Cut area was followed through the 1800's and into the 20th century. The last descriptive scene was a train going by duffys Cut and overlooking nwly identified graves of the brutalized workers.
Try to write like Elmore LEonard and not Bulwar Lytton.