I agree with jespah. 'typical Indian student' phrase is a little stereotypical. Also, breaking your essay into paragraphs makes it easier to read.
When I heard that a choreographer from Bollywood was starting a dance class in our community, I had no real intention of joining it. I was like any other inactive student, mostly spending my time doing work
. However, I decided try it out, and showed up at the first session.
Immediately, I was given steps to learn. I did my best to imitate the choreographer’s moves, and before I knew it, I had learned an entire dance. I liked how I surprised myself
, and decided to try another one. The intricate movements and my (?)
synchronization with the music amazed me, as did my own ability to learn.
Ever since, there's been no looking back
. Dance not only helped me become more active, it also showed me the values of teamwork. After winning various awards and performing at several functions, I realized that dance wasn't just a hobby for me anymore–it was a part of my life.