Please critique the following writing
It's way glib, and excellent if you know that your audience is like minded.
Different cultural and political identities may contribute to but surely don't result in disunity, surely you mean "contribute to disparate views on mutual interdependence" or some such.
Your entire dissertation disses and conveys a distinct negativity that does not reflect the aspirations of those committed to ASEAN.
You slag off at the organ in every sentence.
F minus for geopolitics, A plus for supremacist dogma.