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Which of the two letters of invitation is worse?

Letter 1

Dear Sir,
It's out great pleasure to inform you that the institute of xxx, a
widely known and reputed institute with state-of-the art technology,
running successfully all over India in different centres. It's a proffessional, value based educational system on 'accounts', payroll, taxation, online ffinalisation etc. through computer. It's different in theway because of the innovative programmes latest versions in accounting and the academic excellence. Moreover it's commited to the man-making effort through institunal learning


For your kind information, its Delhi centre is going to have a seminar on xxxxx at xxxxx at xxxxPM. You are cordially invited to attend the seminar and be a participant on the said move.


Letter 2

Dear sir

We are pleased to inform you that our institute is going to conduct a seminar on xxxxx on 25th April at xxxx. We expect there will be about 30 participants consisting retired proffessors, active school teachers and students from various colleges. Your name has been strongly rcommended as an important participant.

This is going to be our 5th seminar. We are glad to say that we received a lot of encouraging remarks and letters of appreciation for our previous seminars and we are highly enthusiastic about getting this new one more effetively organised.

We certainly would not want to lose the oppertunity to hear views on the topic from a cultured citizen like yourself and therefore we cordially invite you to attend this seminar.

faithfully yours