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Sun 13 Mar, 2005 07:09 pm
Hello!
can anyone plz rewrite it to make it sound proffesional? This is to be shown in an exibition under certain paintings.
"The word patachitra is derived from the Sanskrit word pata, which means a painted piece of cloth, a picture, a tablet or a plate. Chitra means painting or picture. Elements of folk and sophisticated art and craft characterize each finely executed patachitra.
The ways of making these ‘patta’s are different and depend greatly on the quality of colour and cloth to be used. The process in which the patta for these patta painting have been made are fairly modern and are a little different from the traditional ways of making ‘patta’s.
The painters make glue from arrowroot and then mix in it a poison called ‘Maharigiri’. This paste is then smeared on the edges of a piece of cotton cloth, which is then pinned and held tightly on a mounted board. The mount causes a gap between the cloth and the board and makes it easier to remove the cloth after the painting is finished"
Thank you in advance
That is very well done, bubu. I wouldn't change a thing except, perhaps, in the punctuation. You don't need to put patta in quotation marks once the word has been defined in the first paragraph. It looks awkward when you say 'patta's because it makes the second quotation mark look like an apostrophe which would be incorrect in forming a plural. Other than that, I wouldn't change a thing.
Re: proffessional touch
my comments in bold
The word patachitra is derived from the Sanskrit words pata and chitra. Pata means a painted piece of cloth, a picture, a tablet or a plate. Chitra means painting or picture. Elements of folk and sophisticated art characterize each finely crafted patachitra
Although you have explained the origins of the word, you have not explained what the modern word means yet...does it refer to modern art, all of this art, only the classic stuff, the artists themselves, the culture of the artists?where'd the extra t come from?) are different and depend greatly on the quality of colour and cloth used.
--very confusing statement removed--
Modern patta artists use a technique slightly different from the original method. They make glue from arrowroot and then mix in it -- (change to poiston into it, or into a poison, depending on what you mean...might want to explain what the poison is for also...removed extra then pinned and held tightly on a mounted board.
I removed the extra mounted board information because it seems pretty extraneous
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