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Fri 31 Dec, 2004 08:46 am
In the deep night of Dec 3 2004, when I was surfing online, suddenly a name ?'Xingshen Chen' popped up from the screen. I searched out the photo I took with Mr.Chen two years ago when I interviewed him, and put it on the middle of bookshelf. On the wall behind Mr.Chen and me, showed by the photo, there is a round quartz clock, whose hands indicate that moment assuredly: 13 minutes and 4 seconds past 1pm, April 5, 2002.
Hi Ori,
Are you and Mr. Chen both in the photograph? If someone else operated the camera, you'll want to say, "... photograph that was taken..." or something like that.
You need a "the" before "bookcase."
"Quartz" wouldn't be obvious from the photograph, and doesn't add anything.
"... whose hands clearly indicate the time" would be a more usual usage. It's a bit odd that you can see the second hand in a clock that's not the focus of the photograph; perhaps that's a little too accurate. Thirteen minutes would be enough, I think.
And finally, how does the clock indicate the date? You may have to use another sentence clarifying how you know the date.
These are such little changes, compared to your writing a while ago. My congratulations on your improvement -- you have done a lot of work!
Happy New Year!
Thank you Wy.
I post the two threads just for the purpose of how to properly appreciate writings not written by me.
Happy New Year!
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