Re: Writing Concisely with Style
First, you could simply say "Racism has always been a part of my life." Second sentence, make it more emotional, less wordy. Then, just say "In 1939, I recorded Strange Fruit, a poem by Lewis Allen." You could also add "that changed my life."
I'm not going to completely rewrite this for you, you'll have to do that on your own. Billie would not have spoken the way you have written her story. Keep it simple. :wink: Aside from being a great singer, she was also at one point a prostitute, and a drug addict. You have to get into her head and not use phrases like "got the ball rolling in the right direction". You have to think like she would have, at the time, recording the song, and trim trim trim. What you are doing here is DESCRIBING the story, rather than TELLING us the story.