Hi, recently I started practicing essay writing for the upcoming test. And since I'm quite bad at it, I need some suggestions on what should be improved. Below is the essay I wrote. I'll appreciate any feedback. Thanks.
“Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Dancing plays an important role in a culture.”
Dancing plays an important role in cultures and societies around the world. As a matter of fact, in different ways and for different reasons, the act of dancing characterizes many aspects of global cultures since it is considered as a means of expression. Furthermore, dancing can be regarded as a means of entertainment, enjoyment, self-expression and a medium to relieve oneself from stress. This essay aims to examine the impact and importance dancing has in the cultural environment as it is a vehicle of personal and collective expression.
The concept of dancing can be paraphrased as a series of interconnected movements which in their entirety convey a specific message. Thus, dance can also be considered as a codified means of expression similar to languages. Therefore, despite being non-verbal, dancing can create and deliver a clear message and thus it is an essential feature of culture and therefore societies. In fact, an asset of communities and organized groups of people is the ability to communicate with each other, to express oneself and be understood by others. Furthermore, culture is founded on its capacity of being communicated. For instance, if a book was not published or an art exhibition was not displayed, their messages would not be conveyed and both art and literature would fall silent and culture would disappear. Hence, being a non-verbal language, dancing plays an extremely important and fundamental role in societies.
Moreover, in addition to its expressive goal, dancing has the general function of entertaining and relieving from stress. Actually, dance, in all its different styles such as ballet or contemporary dance, is continually featured in theaters and the world of academic dance generates great favour and appeal all around the world. Furthermore, it can be argued that clubs and discotheques are widely spread all around the world joining together people from all ages and social classes who meet to dance and enjoy themselves and, by moving their bodies, relieve themselves from stress.
In conclusion, dance still plays an important role in societies and cultures because it is an important asset for the development and dissemination of culture.
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