Smith town is on the eastern coast of Apple Island, three miles off the coast to the east is the isle of Chick Village.
one possibility here but there are a lot of ways of saying it.
could be Smith town is located on the eastern coast ... slightly more formal feel to that
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limbodog
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Wed 4 Aug, 2004 07:08 am
Re: Please depict this professionally
oristarA wrote:
Smith Town, located at eastern Apple Island, 3 miles away from its coast there is Chick Village (an isle).
Please improve my depiction and make it sounds professional.
I'd say:
Chick Village is three miles East off the coast of Apple Island's Smith Town.
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oristarA
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Thu 5 Aug, 2004 01:55 am
"Smith Town" should be put in first place because the thread is to help the writing of a brief introduction for the town.
So I preferred what Vivien wrote.
But thanks for joining.
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stuh505
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Thu 5 Aug, 2004 01:55 pm
Smith Town is on the eastern coast of Apple Island, 3 miles west of if Chick Village isle.
Vivien's (no offense) reads like it should be 2 sentences.
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Vivien
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Fri 6 Aug, 2004 05:08 am
stuh505 wrote:
Smith Town is on the eastern coast of Apple Island, 3 miles west of if Chick Village isle.
Vivien's (no offense) reads like it should be 2 sentences.
true - it could be a second sentence or use a semi colon instead of the comma.
the second half of your sentence doesn't work! 3 miles west of if Chick Village isle !! .. 3miles to the west is Chick Village island?????
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stuh505
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Fri 6 Aug, 2004 07:28 am
wow, I don't know how that extra "if" found it's way in there. thanks forp pointing that out. If you take out the "if" it is how I meant it...replacing the "of if" with "is" as you suggest doesn't work, though.
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