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They broke the mould!

 
 
Reply Fri 20 Nov, 2015 04:27 am
Earlier in life, as a young man I was trodden with many a personal problems. Some of which, rooted back to my troubled childhood. Even though, the list was arduously long, the ones causing the worst setbacks were the lack of self-confidence and self-inflicted phobias.

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Tes yeux noirs
 
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Reply Fri 20 Nov, 2015 04:39 am
Earlier in life, as a young man I was trodden [trodden? did you mean ridden?] with many a personal problems [either: many personal problems OR many a personal problem].[use comma not fullstop/period] Some [therefore lower case s to start 'some'] of which, [no comma should be here] rooted [rooted? did you mean dated?] back to my troubled childhood. Even though, [remove comma] the list was arduously [arduously? consider omitting] long, the ones causing the worst setbacks were the lack of self-confidence and [insert 'the' here] self-inflicted phobias.
kuben123
 
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Reply Sat 21 Nov, 2015 02:22 pm
@Tes yeux noirs,
Earlier in life I was trodden with many a personal problem, some of which were deeply rooted in my troubled childhood. The ones causing the worst setbacks were the lack of self-confidence and self-inflicted phobias.

Earlier in life I was trodden with many a personal problem, some of which were deeply rooted to my troubled childhood. The ones causing the worst setbacks were the lack of self-confidence and self-inflicted phobias.

Which one sounds better?
dlowan
 
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Reply Sat 21 Nov, 2015 07:29 pm
@kuben123,
I can't get past trodden. What are you trying to say by using that word? It's certainly not correct modern English.
kuben123
 
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Reply Sun 22 Nov, 2015 03:06 am
@dlowan,
Earlier in life I was plagued by many a personal problem, some of which were deeply rooted in my troubled childhood. The ones causing the worst setbacks were the lack of self-confidence and self-inflicted phobias.

Better?
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