Sun 16 Aug, 2015 02:54 am
Here is a slightly awkward sentence - it feels wrong but I'm not sure why. I am particularly unsure about the comma before 'the more so' Could anyone tell me if it is correct or not or how it could be improved:
"Carter’s point would, I suspect, be endorsed by most locals, the more so if it were made explicit that the demon in question is the grey wolf.
I don't see a problem with it. Spoken forms often look awkward when written. The comma represents a pause, and it seems right to me.
Carter’s point would, I suspect, be endorsed by most locals; the moreso if it were made explicit that the demon in question is the Grey Wolf
I don't think the second clause is an independent clause. Semicolons link two indpendent clauses.
Yea FBM I realize that classically they're sposta but today the old rules seem relaxed
Yeah, in informal and creative writing, pretty much anything goes; formal academic writing is still pretty strict about this convention, though, as far as I can tell.