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Sat 25 Apr, 2015 02:36 am
"Sam has been a vital presence for the firm. His lucidity, his obvious delight in detail is so raw and unforced it can feel like…"
I'm having trouble with "His lucidity, his obvious delight..." It feels like a run-on sentence.
Should I write this as ""His lucidity, and his obvious delight..."? How would you write this sentence?
@SeanSmith12,
The original sentence is best because "lucidity" is
exemplified by " delight in detail". i.e. the phrase after the comma is not a separate quality from "lucidity". Perhaps the addition of a comma after "detail" might make this clear.
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