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is this sentence correct?

 
 
Reply Tue 20 Jan, 2015 11:34 am
While fleeing, not many people used to actually escape
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dalehileman
 
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Reply Tue 20 Jan, 2015 11:42 am
@notanenglish,
Yes Not, but needs a bit of flesh

In this attempt to flee their captors, few actually escaped: What initially seemed a horizon of freedom proved to be so fenced by convention that many later expressed a desire to return…..
notanenglish
 
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Reply Tue 20 Jan, 2015 12:05 pm
@dalehileman,
thank you
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McTag
 
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Reply Wed 21 Jan, 2015 10:09 am
@dalehileman,

Is that supposed to be helpful, Dale?
dalehileman
 
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Reply Wed 21 Jan, 2015 12:37 pm
@McTag,
Quote:
Is that supposed to be helpful, Dale?
Yes, no, som'r helped, som'r not

Meanwhile Mac, whatcha havta offer
McTag
 
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Reply Thu 22 Jan, 2015 09:11 am
@dalehileman,

I think, if you have something which will help the OP, then offer it. The quality and content of the question will help you judge how to pitch it.
Otherwise it is better to keep stumm, imo.

I see this OP is a newbie. So make nice, is what I would advise.
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dalehileman
 
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Reply Thu 22 Jan, 2015 11:57 am
@notanenglish,
In accordance with Mac's crit

While fleeing, not many people actually escaped

….reason: "used to" somehow interrupts one's train of understanding

While supposedly fleeing, not many had actually escaped

….."Supposedly" introducing a kind of uncertainty; the"people" deleted as somewhat redundant

Formerly, in their initial attempts at escape not many of them actually succeeded

…..supposing an earlier context defining the time period. Commas incidentally on their way out

While fleeing, however, not many of them actually escaped

….again taking liberties in the assumption of context, the "however" providing a link to the previous thought; with "them" serving much the same purpose in identifying the particular group trying to get away


So I wonder Not whether I might have been of any help at all
…forgiving the pun

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josek20
 
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Reply Thu 22 Jan, 2015 01:31 pm
hi Wink I am new in the forum Wink I come from Poland and have many problem with english grammar..can you help me? Namely, is this sentence correct?
"I was at school with her back in 2010. The we haven't seen/didn't see each other for years." I do not know what option is correct, the first one ot the second one?
McTag
 
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Reply Thu 22 Jan, 2015 01:41 pm
@josek20,

Quote:
I was at school with her back in 2010. The we haven't seen/didn't see each other for years.


"Back in" is okay, but it's a bit colloquial.

Try "I was at school with her in 2010. Then we didn't see each other for years."

also
...Since then we haven't seen each other.
or, After that we didn't see each other for years.
josek20
 
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Reply Thu 22 Jan, 2015 02:16 pm
@McTag,
Thank you very much Wink I have make-up test of practical grammar on Monday; Thanks a lot.
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PUNKEY
 
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Reply Fri 23 Jan, 2015 07:38 am
@notanenglish,
I would say:

Even after fleeing, not many actually escaped.
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