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Fri 4 Jun, 2004 12:12 am
ZR Syndicate emerges from
Hangzhou City private-run enterprises
the biggest one of its kind in which enterprises cooperate
one another
Have the headline and subtitle been expressed proplerly?
ZR Syndicate emerges from Hangzhou City private enterprises
biggest cooperative syndicate to date
also, it's 'cooperate with one another'.
I like the rewriting "biggest cooperative syndicate to date ". It sounds very terse!
That's right. Call me 'Scourge of the Prolix, Avenger of the Overstimulated Sentence". Or tell me to shut up. Whatever. :wink:
I like "Scourge of the Prolix". But if I called you that, I might be suspected as masochism. So I... decide to tell you "Shut up". But how can I demand a good rhetor to shut up? You've trapped me in a dilemma.