Do you feel if the speech is clear?

Hi OristarA! This one's a little longer than most, so I'll just launch in...

There was once an expert who made an experiment -- he wanted a Spanish young man and a Chinese young man, both about 20 years old, to write an article in English at the same time. The result was that the Spaniard wrote out more than 500 words, expressing himself quite clearly, but with lots of misspellings and grammatical errors. He wrote quickly, without editing. The Chinese man wrote his article more cautiously; he frequently edited what he had written -- more than 20 times. He wrote fewer than 300 words and did not have as many misspellings and grammatical errors, but the article could not be read as smoothly.

By all appearances, the former only paid attention to the expression of his ideas, while the latter had strong feelings about his grammar -- a fear of making mistakes in grammar, and the fear seemed to, in some cases, affect the expression of his ideas.

The experiment indicated that people with different social and cultural backgrounds have their own customs and manner of thinking, and when they learn a new language, they would bring their customs and manner into the new language; hence, the result would not be as good.

It is worth it to mention that the methods with which Chinese and Westerners see through phenomena and think about questions are different in many aspects. The difference has indeed limited the ability of Chinese students, especially those limited their English writing skills, causing them unable to exactly and tersely express their ideas in English. So, I want to say to you about the several differences between the English expression and Chinese expression in college-level English writing training.


What do you think?

Hi Wy, thanks for editing. Very nice!

I've learned from you how to use the word "as" that is so neat "as good and as smoothly'!

I didn't get "What do you think?"

Are you kidding? Wy's asking what you thought of her editing; don't incorporate 'what do you think?' in your work? You were kidding, weren't you?

I would also say "young Spanish man" and "young Chinese man" rather than "Spanish young man" and "Chinese young man".

I agree, Rufio; that order of adjectives sounds more natural, I feel..

And sounds polite too, if a reader is picky.

Oristar- Here I go again, picking on the title of your question. It sounds very stilted.

You might have titled the thread:

Is my speech clear?

or

How do you feel about the wording of my speech?

Hi Phoenix,

I think I could use:

Is the speech clear?

Because I didn't want to label the speech as "my".