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WBYeats
 
Reply Sat 13 Sep, 2014 07:42 am
Are my sentences natural English?:

Dear Mr Eliot

I am writing to ask for permission of extended residence at the college during D2 period. Summer residence at the college is divided into A, B, C, and D1 and D2 periods. But D1 period does not reach the start of the new term, which means students who have applied for this period will have to check out, while those who have applied for D2 will not, but since D2 is applicable to law students only, which I am not, can I ask for special permission to apply for it? The problem I have is, my house is now being invaded by insects, and owing to the construction work near it, it is constantly beset by mosquitos, so much so that even a short-time visit back there would mean a number of weals. So I sincerely hope you can give me this permission. I look forward to your favourable reply. Thank you.

Yours sincerely
William Yeats
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Bazza6
 
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Reply Sat 13 Sep, 2014 08:22 am
@WBYeats,
There are many variations as to how this could be written. This is my version:

I am writing to seek permission for extended residence at the college during the D2 period. As you are aware, the D1 period does not extend to the start of the new term, so that I will have to check out. Law students who have applied for D2 do not; and hence, my request for special permission to apply for D2. (((or are you asking specifically for "residency" - I don't know what D2 entails.)))

My difficulty is that my house is now being invaded by insects, owing to the construction work nearby, and is constantly beset by mosquitos. Even a brief visit back there occasions extensive wheals on my body.

I do sincerely hope you can extend the requested permission, and trust I will hear from you soon.

(Note the spelling of 'wheal' )

Oh, and I think it only fair to you and other forum members who might peruse this, and any other contribution I make to this forum, that Setanta considers:
"Bazza's English is piss-poor. I advise you to ignore anything Bazza says on the subject….If you (Bazza6) claim to be a native speaker of English, then i (sic) would not only say that your English is piss-poor, i'd (sic) say you were lying."
McTag
 
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Reply Sat 13 Sep, 2014 04:51 pm
@Bazza6,

Quote:
(Note the spelling of 'wheal' )


I noted it principally because it's wrong.

But also because "weal" is not the correct word to use here. You don't get a weal from an insect bite, but from whip lash or similar cause of injury.
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oristarA
 
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Reply Sat 13 Sep, 2014 08:40 pm
@Bazza6,
Bazza6 wrote:



My difficulty is that my house is now being invaded by insects, owing to the construction work nearby, and is constantly beset by mosquitos. Even a brief visit back there occasions extensive wheals on my body.

I do sincerely hope you can extend the requested permission, and trust I will hear from you soon.

(Note the spelling of 'wheal' )



McTag wrote:


Quote:
(Note the spelling of 'wheal' )


I noted it principally because it's wrong.

But also because "weal" is not the correct word to use here. You don't get a weal from an insect bite, but from whip lash or similar cause of injury.


The question is, my dictionary gives the same definition for "wheal" and "weal":

wheal [hwi:l]

n.
a raised mark on the skin (as produced by the blow of a whip); characteristic of many allergic reactions

weal [wiːl]
n.
a raised mark on the skin (as produced by the blow of a whip); characteristic of many allergic reactions
oristarA
 
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Reply Sat 13 Sep, 2014 08:43 pm
@oristarA,

Plus, the word "body" sounds dead. Is there any other word with the same meaning to replace it?
One Eyed Mind
 
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Reply Sat 13 Sep, 2014 08:46 pm
@oristarA,
the encompassing structure
oristarA
 
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Reply Sat 13 Sep, 2014 08:54 pm
@One Eyed Mind,
One Eyed Mind wrote:

the encompassing structure


Eh? I wonder whether English is your native tongue.
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oristarA
 
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Reply Sat 13 Sep, 2014 08:55 pm
@oristarA,
McTag is right.
I will not adopt the definition of the dictionary.
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Bazza6
 
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Reply Sun 14 Sep, 2014 04:01 am
@oristarA,
wheal :
Medicine : an area of the skin which is temporarily raised, typically reddened, and usually accompanied by itching.

That pertains to ANY insect bite.
oristarA
 
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Reply Sun 14 Sep, 2014 06:30 am
@Bazza6,
Bazza6 wrote:

wheal :
Medicine : an area of the skin which is temporarily raised, typically reddened, and usually accompanied by itching.

That pertains to ANY insect bite.


See this, you'd be screwed:

Etymology of weal
early 19th century: variant of wale, influenced by obsolete wheal 'suppurate'
Meaning of weal
noun
1. the mark of a stripe. see wale.
2. an area of the skin which is temporarily raised, typically reddened, and usually accompanied by itching.

Link:
http://www.findmewords.com/definition-of-weal.html
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McTag
 
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Reply Sun 14 Sep, 2014 07:17 am
@Bazza6,

Bazz, you can take my advice or not, it's freely given without any obligation.
But you're proving Setanta right, sadly.
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