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Is my sentence understandable and correct?

 
 
imsak
 
Reply Wed 18 Jun, 2014 09:39 am
Yesterday I happened to bump into a friend of mine one of whose friend I have very well known even before I knew him.

I'm confused, not sure if my sentence above is grammatical and understandable to the readers.

If not, could you please point out where in the sentence is wrong and right it to right form.
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dalehileman
 
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Reply Wed 18 Jun, 2014 11:33 am
@imsak,
Technically Im, we say "…one of whose friends….," though you might replace "have" by "had"

While "…very well known…" is awkward, as is using "friend" twice, and "…of mine…" is superfluous; maybe even "happened to". We'd be more likely to say something like

"Yesterday I bumped into a friend who I subsequently learned was the acquaintance of an even earlier buddy"

…depending of course on the exact circumstances
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OmSigDAVID
 
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Reply Wed 18 Jun, 2014 11:44 am
@imsak,
I 'd do it this way:
DAVID wrote:
Yesterday, I happened to bump into a friend of mine
one of whose friends I have known very well, even before I knew him.
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imsak
 
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Reply Wed 18 Jun, 2014 05:23 pm
Thanks to all. Your answer is of very much help to me.

What I want to convey is:

Yesterday, I bumped into A at the market. A is my friend. A has some friends. One of A's friends is B. I have known B very well even before I knew A.

McTag
 
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Reply Thu 19 Jun, 2014 02:41 am
@imsak,

David's suggestion works fine for that, even although in grammatical terms there is some doubt who the "him" at the end refers to...but from a commonsense standpoint, it's fine.
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JTT
 
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Reply Fri 20 Jun, 2014 01:40 pm
@imsak,
Yesterday, I bumped into A at the market. A is my friend. A has some friends. One of A's friends is B. I have known B very well even before I knew A.

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Yesterday, I bumped into a friend, A, at the market. A has a friend, B, that I knew even before I knew A.
OmSigDAVID
 
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Reply Fri 20 Jun, 2014 01:44 pm
@imsak,
This is simpler and easier:
DAVID wrote:
Yesterday, I bumped into a friend of mine
one of whose friends I have known very well, even before I knew him.
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Frank Apisa
 
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Reply Fri 20 Jun, 2014 02:28 pm
I like:

Yesterday, I bumped into my friend Herb at the market. One of Herb's other friends is Jack. I have known Jack for even longer than I have known Herb.
JTT
 
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Reply Fri 20 Jun, 2014 04:46 pm
@JTT,
It does sound better with actual names.

Yesterday, I bumped into a friend, Adam, at the market. Adam has a friend, Bob, that I knew even before I knew Adam.
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OmSigDAVID
 
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Reply Fri 20 Jun, 2014 06:43 pm
@Frank Apisa,
Frank Apisa wrote:

I like:

Yesterday, I bumped into my friend Herb at the market.
One of Herb's other friends is Jack. I have known Jack for even longer than I have known Herb.

That 's nice. I 'd leave out the word: for.
Frank Apisa
 
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Reply Fri 20 Jun, 2014 08:00 pm
@OmSigDAVID,
OmSigDAVID wrote:

Frank Apisa wrote:

I like:

Yesterday, I bumped into my friend Herb at the market.
One of Herb's other friends is Jack. I have known Jack for even longer than I have known Herb.

That 's nice. I 'd leave out the word: for.


Agreed! Wink
JTT
 
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Reply Fri 20 Jun, 2014 08:10 pm
@Frank Apisa,
As it is an option, it would depend. With FOR, it is more emphatic.
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