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how could i change or rephrase the passage to be better and sound better?

 
 
Tue 4 Dec, 2012 11:21 pm
i know i have reposted this for the third time i just really need help with it and cant come up with anything that sounds better and im under a time rush ): i did write the below once already in my lecture and would just like to repeat it

so with that new info added how can i change "as previously stated were used" and "which is again" i hate the way they sound and know their are better phrases and words to use i just really cant think of any i

the overall objective of the studies conducted as previously stated were used to try and solve the question which is again; does watching violence on tv cause adolescents to become more aggressive or are adolescents who are more aggressive simply more likely to enjoy violence on tv?

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Tue 4 Dec, 2012 11:53 pm
not totally clear which of your clauses is modifying what, but maybe something like,
As previously stated, the studies were analyzed to try to answer the question:...."

You sure you want to say, "the overall objective...were...."?
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