Run on sentence?

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I have a photo show coming up and I'm writing the forward explaining my work. I have concerns with one of my sentences: it might be a bit long and I'm not sure how to break it up, or even if I should break it at all and just change the punctuation.

Here is the sentence: "In these images what would normally be a lovely beachscape is now obstructed by a pipe, a jetty, a building, or even an old sunken ship; forgotten entities slowly decaying in the sea."

The rest of the forward (along with the images) can be seen here if you are interested: http://www.flickr.com/photos/jordanasturaro/sets/72157606893121001/

Any help would be appreciated!

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@jordanabanana,

jordanabanana wrote:

Here is the sentence: "In these images, what would normally be a lovely beachscape is now obstructed by a pipe, a jetty, a building, or even an old sunken ship; forgotten entities slowly decaying in the sea."

Otherwise, I think it's fine.

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@Mame,

A-ha! I was thinking I should just add a comma there... it's just I was worried there would be too many at that point. Thanks!!

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@jordanabanana,

"What would normally be a lovely beachscape is now obstructed by a pipe, a jetty, a building, or even an old sunken ship. They are forgotten entities slowly decaying in the sea."
You could turn the single sentence into two I suppose. That they are photographic images is obvious and simply implied.

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@jordanabanana,

Quote:

It is difficult to find a beach without any evidence of intrusion made by man. In these images

Pristine beaches unsullied by the intrusion of man are rare.

What would otherwise be a beautiful beachscape is stymied by a rotting hulk, jetty, pipe, and building slowly decaying into the sea.

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