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Reply Fri 16 Jan, 2004 02:32 am
A week of nail-bitting of Wall Street was ended by the statement in which US government announced that the trade agreement has been settled.
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dlowan
 
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Reply Fri 16 Jan, 2004 02:57 am
A week of nail-biting by Wall Street was ended by the US Government's announcement that the trade agreement had been settled.
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oristarA
 
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Reply Fri 16 Jan, 2004 03:30 am
Thanks dlowan.

I didn't get what the "by" in your rewriting means. How about "a week of nail-biting on Wall Street..." Rolling Eyes
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dlowan
 
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Reply Fri 16 Jan, 2004 03:49 am
On is fine.

"By" would mean that the nails bitten were those of the denizens of the famous street.
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oristarA
 
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Reply Fri 16 Jan, 2004 06:34 am
Interesting... Very Happy
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joefromchicago
 
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Reply Fri 16 Jan, 2004 07:25 am
Re: Please improve this sentence
A week of nail-bitting by Wall Street ended when the US government announced that the trade agreement had been settled.

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A week of nail-biting by Wall Street ended with the US government's announcement that the trade agreement had been settled.

Get rid of the passive construction, eliminate the redundant "statement."
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gustavratzenhofer
 
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Reply Fri 16 Jan, 2004 07:42 am
A week of nail-biting on Wall Street came to an end today with the govenment's announcement of the trade agreement settlement.
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gustavratzenhofer
 
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Reply Fri 16 Jan, 2004 07:45 am
Or how about... Many Wall Street denizens, fearing the trade agreement would never be settled, jumped to their deaths today.
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joefromchicago
 
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Reply Fri 16 Jan, 2004 09:03 am
gustavratzenhofer wrote:
Or how about... Many Wall Street denizens, fearing the trade agreement would never be settled, jumped to their deaths today.

I prefer this solution, albeit more on policy grounds than on linguistic ones.
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oristarA
 
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Reply Sat 17 Jan, 2004 03:10 am
Thanks! Very Happy

And how about "Washington" instead of "the US government"?
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