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Mon 18 Oct, 2010 03:55 am
In North China's Shanxi province, flour is a main material for the food, and there are more than a hundred types of food made from flour in the area. While making food, people hundreds of years ago tried to make it beautiful, as well as delicious. They made the steamed bread or other kinds of cake into different shapes. And these cakes and breads are the so-called "flour sculpture" today.
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Well, if it being awkward, what is your suggestion?
It's not bad at all, although you twice use the definite article needlessly: flour is a main material for the food should read flour is the main material for food. Again, you write: They made the steamed bread or other kinds of cake should read They made steamed bread or other kinds of cake. One could argue that bread and cake are not at all alike, but having had Chinese steamed bread, i understand why one would group it with cake. You might explain that in your paragraph. Perhaps something such as: They made steamed bread (more like a form of cake) or other kinds of cake . . .. It's no big deal, though, you don't really need to explain it, and that could make the paragraph awkward.
@Setanta,
Thank you Set.
Does "Well,
if it being awkward, what is your suggestion? " sound okay?
@oristarA,
"Beautiful, as well as delicious" could perhaps better be written "attractive , as well as...." or "artistic, as well as..." or "decorative, as well as..."
I'd plump for the last.
Avoid starting a sentence with "And". In the final sentence that word can be omitted.
@contrex,
Quote:Avoid starting a sentence with "And".
This is a silly prescription, C.
Quote:In the final sentence that word can be omitted.
This could be good advice if you explained why.
@JTT,
JTT wrote:
Quote:Avoid starting a sentence with "And".
This is a silly prescription, C.
Quote:In the final sentence that word can be omitted.
This could be good advice if you explained why.
I think it looks awkward.
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