How about this? Edit it if possible

this seems incorrect but SPUN does not seem to fit.
more expert help may be needed here.
Is span a real word? past tense of spin?
the passage is a semi disjointed collections of thoughts and memories and reccolections set in a poetic manner
below is how i would write but I think it changes the passages core ????...Is syntax the right word.

My head spinning, you led me by the hand, dancing along a crazy theme.

Answering (one of) my own queries

Thank you both.

Now please comment on this one:

Light vied with wine, elegance mixed with fragrance, laughing covered by greetings, the crowed was busy at handshaking. You stood there, eyes on me. I trembled at the sparkles, brighter than the light. A masterpiece from God, I felt dizzy. We were not near, yet we were together.

Perfectly correct in UK English.

danced (to) along the crazy theme.


i think that sounds better

Hot summer.
Cheerful Cocktail.
You took my hand.
We fled into another world of band.
You sat by my side, long hair tied behind, cool and killing.
Smile floating on the lemonade,
Soft and smooth.
How I was amazed.
Your face looked like the cover of the magazine.
My head spun.
You lead my hand,
And danced along the crazy theme.
(Sorry if it was supposed to be a paragraph. I read it like it was a poem so I turned into a stanza.)

Light vied with wine,
Elegance mixed with fragrance,
Laughing covered by greetings,
The crowed was busy at handshaking.
You stood there,
Eyes on me.
I trembled at the sparkles,
Brighter than the light.
A masterpiece from God,
I felt dizzy.
We were not near,
Yet we were together.
(Once again sorry but it seems fit to be another stanza of a poem.)
(And it is perfect as is)