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Is it clear for native English speakers?

 
 
Reply Sat 25 Sep, 2010 08:36 pm


(From an introduction for a website):

The impressions (visits) of a single day from independent IP addresses are more than 150,000. The number of real-time online members has surpassed 13,000 at best every day, with impressions of PV (Page View) surpassing 1,800,000. The overall impression in eight years has exceeded 1.2 billions.

If not clear, how to edit it?
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oristarA
 
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Reply Sat 25 Sep, 2010 10:03 pm

I wonder whether the word "impression" has been used properly here.

"Impression" means:
For example, Jack has an independent IP address in US, and Mary has another in UK; both of them visited Able2know.org one day. That is, Able2know has 2 impressions added to its overall impression that day.
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contrex
 
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Reply Sun 26 Sep, 2010 12:35 am
We use a definite article when referring to the US or the UK. Also you seem a bit hazy about singular and plural (were you writing in a hurry?) but apart from that the example in your second post is OK.
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MontereyJack
 
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Reply Sun 26 Sep, 2010 12:46 am
If "impression" is the technical term referring to a distinct visit to a web site, then it's okay. However it's a use of the word that I, as a general reader, had never heard before. "Visit" I had heard before in this context. If "impression" is just a term that you pulled out of some concept of similarity, I wouldn't use it.
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contrex
 
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Reply Sun 26 Sep, 2010 12:54 am
"Impression" is used as a marketing term when discussing website usage statistics. It means the same as "hit" or "ad view".

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oristarA
 
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Reply Sun 26 Sep, 2010 05:01 am
Thank you both.

But Contrex, indeed I couldn't where I've used "singular" or "plural" form properly or not. Would you like to edit it directly?

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Quote:
The impressions (distinct visits) of a single day from independent IP addresses are more than 150,000. The number of real-time online members has surpassed 13,000 at best every day, with impressions of PV (Page View) surpassing 1,800,000. The overall impression in eight years has exceeded 1.2 billions.
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contrex
 
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Reply Sun 26 Sep, 2010 06:05 am
Quote:
The overall impression (1) in eight years has (2) exceeded 1.2 billions(3).


Unless you meant the impression count, or total, or figure, then:

1. Definitely should be "impressions" with an 's'
2. They have exceeded.
3. Adding an 's' to thousand, million, billion, etc when used this way is not wrong, but many native speakers will find it old fashioned and awkward.


oristarA
 
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Reply Sun 26 Sep, 2010 06:17 am
@contrex,

Thank you Contrex.

Now is it crystal clear at first sight for a native E speaker?

The impressions (distinct visits) of a single day from independent IP addresses are more than 150,000. The number of real-time online members has surpassed 13,000 at best every day, with impressions of PV (Page View) surpassing 1,800,000. The overall impressions in eight years have exceeded 1.2 billion.
contrex
 
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Reply Sun 26 Sep, 2010 06:22 am
@oristarA,
It's grammatically OK but the meaning is not clear.

The impressions (distinct visits) of a single day from independent IP addresses are more than 150,000.

What does that mean? Every day? Or the most ever?

The number of real-time online members has surpassed 13,000 at best every day,

You just said 150,000. Where does 13,000 come from?

with impressions of PV (Page View) surpassing 1,800,000.

What is PV? What does this figure mean?

The overall impressions in eight years have exceeded 1.2 billion.
oristarA
 
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Reply Sun 26 Sep, 2010 07:31 am
@contrex,

Quote:
The impressions (distinct visits) of a single day from independent IP addresses are more than 150,000.

What does that mean? Every day? Or the most ever?


For example: On Sep. 1, Sep.2, Sep.3... each day able2know had 3000 more visitors (users, with their independent IP adresses) who clicked and viewed the pages of 2ble2know. Which I would have expressed with "The impressions (distinct visits) of a single day from independent IP addresses are more than 3000.


Quote:
The number of real-time online members has surpassed 13,000 at best every day,

You just said 150,000. Where does 13,000 come from?



For example: during an hour (18:00 - 19:00) on Sep.1, able2know had 1010 members who were chatting one another, but during other hours (like 5:00-6:00), less than 800 members chatting in able2know. I expressed this as "The number of real-time online members has surpassed 1,000 at best every day."

But if the 1010 visitors' IP addresses were different with the 800 visitors',
obviously able2know would have at least 1810 visitors on Sep.1. That is where my "150,000" came from.


Quote:
What is PV? What does this figure mean?


If visitor Jack viewed 20 pages of able2know on Sep.1, his PV figure would be 20, but he had only one IP address, so his visiting able2know counts one impression on Sep.1.

Quote:
The overall impressions in eight years have exceeded 1.2 billion.


No comment.










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oristarA
 
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Reply Tue 28 Sep, 2010 04:29 am
Every month newly registered members add to the community.

Is the sentence okay?
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Setanta
 
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Reply Tue 28 Sep, 2010 04:31 am
It's OK--but you might better say that "new members are added to the community."
JTT
 
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Reply Wed 29 Sep, 2010 12:48 pm
@Setanta,
Quote:
Every month newly registered members add to the community.

Is the sentence okay?



Quote:
It's OK--but you might better say that "new members are added to the community."


It's not okay in the sense that the meaning is different, Ori. Your sentence, with the active voice, holds a meaning that the new members in some way contribute to the community.

I can't see any way for your sentence to only state a numerical addition, though I could be missing something.

Setanta's offering, which is in the passive voice shows that the new members are numerically added to the roster by some unknown actor.



oristarA
 
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Reply Wed 29 Sep, 2010 11:39 pm
@JTT,

Excellent.
Thank you JTT.

Also thanks to Setanta.
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laughoutlood
 
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Reply Thu 30 Sep, 2010 12:19 am
@oristarA,
the translation is complete drivel to a native english speaker, try:

- 150,000 hits daily from individual IP's

- up to 13,000 members visit every day

- 1.2 billion views in 8 years

oristarA
 
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Reply Sun 3 Oct, 2010 01:04 am
@laughoutlood,

Quote:
- 150,000 hits daily from individual IP's

- up to 13,000 members visit every day


Hmm, 150,000 hits daily from individual IP's, so there are up to 150,000 members visit every day. Because a remember has to log in or he/she cannot view the pages of the website (different to able2know).

I've said 13,000 refers to the maximum number of the remembers who are online using the website at the same time at any single day.


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contrex
 
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Reply Sun 3 Oct, 2010 02:38 am
"Remember" and "member" are 2 different words.
oristarA
 
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Reply Sun 3 Oct, 2010 05:24 am
@contrex,
Well, thanks. It was just a typo, you know.

How to express tersely about "I've said 13,000 refers to the maximum number of the members who are online using the website at the same time at any single day." Contrex?
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