Quote:it is surprising some women can't find their match
"Can't" is slangy; cannot is better.
Quote:This can be put down to two plausible reasons
1. "Put down" is slangy; attributed is better.
2. Causes, not reasons.
Quote:which may be attributed a product of the one-child policy
The word "attributed", here, is superfluous and also incorrectly used (one attributes an outcome
to a cause)
Consequence is better than product.
Quote:they have this oversized self-esteem
"This" is slangy; "an" is better.
Quote:a lot of their sisters don't even get the chance to go to college!
"Don't" is slangy: do not is better.
"Even" is unnecessary.
The exclamation mark should be replaced with a full stop ("period"). Avoid overuse of exclamation marks in formal writing. They are hardly ever necessary.
I have to add that I find the sentiments expressed in this article contemptible, and I am not surprised if many educated Chinese women reject the kind of man who thinks like that.