How to Write It Professionally?

Here's one way (remove the red, add the blue):
We can open a common account in a bank and deposit all our promised capital into it. Each of the three of us (we are a trinity) might hold a different part of a the three-part password; that consists of 3 parts -- lacking any of which will cause any one cannot draw or remit capital -- even a penny-- from the account. thus, it would take all three to make any withdrawal from the account. And, we should exchange our ID cards and keep it for each other until the project has been finished successfully. All These measures are dedicated to the safety assuring that each of us should carry carries out his obligation and bears his the responsibility that he has promised assumed. Given If the application for the project fails, these measures can be sure of returning capital, paying back expenses and cancelling the account. assure that all expenses can be covered, the capital can be returned to investors, and the account can be cancelled.

Resulting in:
We can open a common account in a bank and deposit all our promised capital into it. Each of the three of us might hold a different part of a three-part password; thus, it would take all three to make any withdrawal from the account. And, we should exchange ID cards until the project has been finished successfully. These measures are dedicated to assuring that each of us carries out his obligation and bears the responsibility that he has assumed. If the application for the project fails, these measures can assure that all expenses can be covered, the capital can be returned to investors, and the account can be cancelled.

Two minor adjustments, Wy

These measures are dedicated to ENsuring that each of us carries out his obligation and bears the responsibility that he has assumed. If the application for the project fails, these measures can ENsure that all expenses can be covered, the capital can be returned to investors, and the account can be cancelled.


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Thanks, Roberta!

Good rewriting, Wy!

Roberta, your opinion on the nuance has made the rewriting perfect

:-)