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Mon 10 May, 2010 08:30 pm
Oh the sky high
And the ocean blue
The fish frolics
And the bird back to its nest
Riding on my steed,
Will I go with the wind?
Let the foolish girl giggles,
Alone, I'm the king of my world
Let the foolish girl giggle,
(singular subject, singular verb)
@sullyfish6,
Lo, what a naive mistake I've made.
I think the last sentence is not fluent and needs to be improved:
Alone, I'm the king of my world
It's up to you, but my suggestion would be a coma at the end of the first sentence, then a period to end the next, and so on and so forth. Poems usually are'nt, or don't have to be edited correctly, (besides spelling and such,) but I always use puncuation if possible. That could be just me though. It's a beautiful poem. =]
@ismbella,
Thank you for reminding me of that.
@sullyfish6,
Quote:Let the foolish girl giggle,
(singular subject, singular verb)
It's not that it's a singular subject, Sully. If it was, then it would have the 's'.
the foolish girl giggle
s
@oristarA,
Quote:And the bird back to its nest
It's a poem, so okay, but you do know that 'back' isn't a verb here, right, Ori?
@JTT,
Quote:It's a poem, so okay, but you do know that 'back' isn't a verb here, right, Ori?
I'm not very clear if it should use "backs"(verb) or use "back" (adjective) here.
"Backs" stands. But is using the adjective "back" okay here?
Quote:And the bird back to its nest
If you are indicating the bird flying home then...
the bird returns to its nest.
Fish Frolics grates a little. fish frolic I think unless the sentiment expressed is intended to indicate one fish only.
Quote:I'm not very clear if it should use "backs"(verb) or use "back" (adjective) here.
"Backs" stands. But is using the adjective "back" okay here?
If you wish to express a picture of a bird walking (or flying) backward then backS is correct. A truck backs into a loading bay, a car backs into a drive way.
Quote:Let the foolish girl giggles,
let the foolish girl giggle = a single girl
girlS giggle = more than one girl
@oristarA,
Quote:But is using the adjective "back" okay here?
It's the best choice, Ori. It's a poem, you have hereby been granted a dollop of poetic license.
In normal English, a bird/person/etc 'goes back' to sth.
@dadpad,
dadpad wrote:
Quote:Let the foolish girl giggles,
let the foolish girl giggle = a single girl
girlS giggle = more than one girl
I hope this does not confuse you too much ori
the word giggles could beused as a verb although not in the case of this poem
The foolish girl giggles.
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